Braids

[proper kindle]

This poem of mine depicts the struggles of queer relationships. Feel free to interpret further!

[proper kindle]

@olive solar @mystic burrow
@cinder wyvern
@quartz pawn hey sharnalt hope you don't mind the ping, I'd love to have your comments if you wanna read this one. Thanks!

@zealous crescent

[quartz pawn]

Lol, no.

I like this poem, and the idea.

Relatable.

[cinder wyvern]

Damn bro hit my pisces sun right out in the open!!

[proper kindle]

Thanks!

[proper kindle]

Haha too much exposure

[cinder wyvern]

I think imma transition to some music, for a while, take a short break on writing, but really good!!

We should get some homies to come up with a beautiful corpse soon

its really fun!

[proper kindle]

Thanks tho are you high-

[zinc gazelle]

Great!!!!

[cinder wyvern]

no im not my brain does that naturally honestly

also im typing rather than having a convo

genuinley neuro-divergence, and like luckily im seeing what seems to be a good therapist on wednesday to get a little more regulated for day to day lol

[proper kindle]

Ah, a creative outlet on the go

[proper kindle]

No worries, I get that. Hope it goes well!!

[cinder wyvern]

yeah I can kinda give some background if youd want to hear a bit more?

[tame coyote]

Wonderful! @cinder wyvern has just pregressed to level 10!

[coarse light]

*yeah I can kinda

give some background if youd want

to hear a bit more?*

- itzzapizza

[cinder wyvern]

no is always more than valid too!!!

[proper kindle]

Sure I'd love understand you more if you wish to express, how about in dms it would be a better medium :))

[cinder wyvern]

yeye

[proper kindle]

i love the correlation between swimming in an ocean of tears, growing fins, and the fishtail braids. it's so creative and such a great play with words to convey a certain feeling I cannot fully explain.

[proper kindle]

Thanks a bunch Irene! Happy to know you enjoyed it

[tame coyote]

Wonderful! @proper kindle has just pregressed to level 13!

[mystic burrow]

the way you describe emotions as threads in a braid captures how love, pain, and betrayal are all intertwined. it feels so personal-
the imagery of having your water and air taken away really hit hard, showing how suffocating and lost you felt. swimming in tears and seeing scales on your skin is such a vivid way to show how deeply the pain affected you, transforming you completely. the poem entirely is raw, honest, and very moving.

greattt jobbb!!!!!!!

[proper kindle]

Ah thank youu Zeno! I'm glad you liked it :))

[mystic burrow]

:))

[olive solar]

incredibly late good lord
bumping for ease

this honestly might be the first by you i haven’t been able to understand
though that’s probably because i have no experience with the inspired topic
BUT !
i will say this: even without analysis of meaning, i do still quite like this one. it’s emotional, and kind of takes the reader on a sort of story. the metaphors used are super unique yet they intertwine wonderfully and paint a clear picture
even if i can’t quite personally make sense of this picture, it’s like an abstract painting
even without understanding what’s being drawn, it can still be appreciated

[proper kindle]

Thank you Ikari! What part of the work you couldn't understand? Perhaps I can provide a small insight?

[olive solar]

i suppose honestly the parallel being drawn
the closest thing i can get to an interpretation is honestly:
reminiscing on the time spent with someone, perhaps in a more literal sense here with braiding each other’s hair
but it came to some sort of downfall or collapse, and the last two lines seem to imply braiding one’s own hair as if to embrace the nostalgia?
but that feels like a bit of a stretch and this is coming purely from the poem itself and not any personal resonance
but i also can’t brain it enough to make some sort of queer connection as much as im trying to
i do really like the poem but i feel like im really only grasping this one on surface level understanding, if at all

i feel like im taking it too literally but my brain is falling short of anything else

[proper kindle]

I understand, that's accurate enough at some point.
I believe the queer reference would be braiding each other's hair, the dynamics of the relationship changes and the poet feels deprived of necessities (water, air) while they are together. So the only hydration the speaker has is their own tears, it's soo much from the pain that it becomes an ocean. Surrounded by it, the poet begins to swim to cross it all but the salted water (tears) makes them grow scales and fins like that of a sea creature. An important aspect of a fish's anatomy would be their tail consider how it helps them with movement. The realization hits the poet that the last time they braided their beloved's hair, it was in a gorgeous fishtail style, coming to the conclusion they have gave it away their fishtail, the important aspect they were to grow right now implying the transformation throughout it all is a process and the inflicted pain of past does a lot more than one can imagine. In queer relationships, especially wlw there's a lot of deeper level of emotional bonding and attachment, they have higher expectations from each other too, the intensity of ache experienced is physically and mentally exhausting. That's also why it's called to be a Canon moment in reels nowadays, Breaking up with your first girlfriend, it hits different way too different and hurts you the most but also changes you the most too.

[olive solar]

ou
i think i see where you’re coming from
even if i haven’t been there before
this honestly gives me a new level of appreciation though, having a better understanding on the thought process behind this one
i absolutely adored the parallels being drawn before, but now that i can follow along on a deeper level, i love it even more
i can say even more confidently than before that this is a wonderfully crafted poem~ both in its style and format, and the topic and the way it’s addressed

[proper kindle]

Glad that you appreciate it!

Oh my, i love your work.

I have no words.