verbal dew
Silent smile and eyes that gleam
Sunlit hair breaks reverie
Siphoned notions to escape
Secretly thoughts ne’er abate
Wisely walk away from wiles
Wistful thoughts of what’s beneath
Wonder what rewards these smiles
Whisper words that seek release
Sudden smile, again entranced
Swivel from slim elegance
Sunder siphon, now a flood
Shimmer between lust and love
Forgetting feelings formed in haste
Forging friendship in their place
Figments in a confused mind
Finding prose to fill the time
rough tundra
Yooo I love the initial play
your writing style is so rich in a good way
also I love the aabb abab rhyme scheme you got going on
cerulean salmon
Good stuff
verbal dew
also I love the aabb abab rhyme scheme you got going on
Ty. I have been trying to not let my rhyming be too regular.
verbal dew
I'm so gonna steal the same initial concept btw that's epic
That is the highest of praise. Please do.
rough tundra
Fully deserved
covert hawk
That "Swivel from slim elegance" caught me off guard at first, but when I managed to break it down and work it out, it was, indeed, a pretty elegant line
If I'm interpreting this one correctly, based on the title and the content, is it about a missed connection with a girl?
where perhaps you two shared a look and a smile?
and because there was no one who acted on that initial attraction, it turned into a friendship instead?
and thus when you said "poetry is a good way to process your thoughts", this was your way of processing your complex emotions regarding your feelings towards her?
verbal dew
If I'm interpreting this one correctly, based on the title and the content, is i...
Exactly. The situation is a bit more complicated, but that is how life goes.
This was the first one I wrote about her
https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1235122123098296372
Then they progressively get more distraught.
covert hawk
Exactly. The situation is a bit more complicated, but that is how life goes.
Just read your fermentation one
I don't normally like freeverse, because I think a lot of times it's just kind of word salad
but there's a coherent train of thought in that one
I can see and follow the logic between what you're saying
even if you might have been blasted out of your mind while writing that (ALLEGEDLY)
the word play and the imagery are fantastic too
verbal dew
Haha, nah. I live a pretty sober life these days. I had drank a couple of bottles of wine when I felt the feelings I wrote about, however.
That one took a lot of work and many days.
covert hawk
That one took a lot of work and many days.
you fermented it 😂