#Never Good Enough

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leaden turtle
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I don't know,
Don't know why.

My happiness turned to sadness
Now my dreams are my fears
My smiles are my tears
Sunshine is the darkness
My kindness is the foolishness
I give my best, but I'm never good enough
I try to be perfect, but it's always tough.

I don't know,
Don't know why.

I give my heart
I give my soul
I give my best -
But I'm never good enough.
I try to be perfect, but it's always tough.

"Why?"
I don't know,
Don't know why.
"Why? "
"Why?"
"Why? Never good enough "

ENOUGH

I'm worth everything!
For me self-acceptance is a blessing.
I give my best, and that's more than enough,
I'm letting go of perfection, it's time to rebuff.

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leaden turtle
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pine stone
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The struggle to be perfect and the eventual peace found in self-acceptance really hits home. It's proper moving mate

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leaden turtle
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pine stone
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I liked this one
Personally
Last stanza was my fav

void quartz
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@leaden turtle Persecution, tortured soul, self-acceptance are subjects steeped in complexity. While your poem is good at conveying these topics, it is too plain and too straightforward a narrative, rather than elaborating more on the pain and suffering and final self-acceptance of your character with good use of strong imagery and metaphors. This is constructive criticism for if you feel the need to evolve your piece into something stronger, something more with a powerful impact behind it, as it definitely has the potential to be one. But if you're happy with it as it is, then let it be.. and remember that all is subjective at the end of the day.

Having said all that, I do love the line "I'm letting go of perfection" as it's actually quite inspiring. 😊 🌸

leaden turtle
atomic shard
# leaden turtle I don't know, Don't know why. My happiness turned to sadness Now my dreams are ...

this poem perfectly captures the lack of self worth and wanting to be enough. it vividly depicts the writer's struggle for perfection and yearning to be enough for themself. in the closing lines, the writer finally realize how much they are worth and how much they can be for themselves. its a very relatable and hopeful poem and it really caught my eye (i was screaming the dialogue lol) good job! do keep writing ❤️

summer blaze
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this was motivating to read, especially the second half. But I feel like shift from metaphors in the first half of the poem wasn't so smooth to the second half. If you were to expand this poem, you could maybe make a transition to the dialogue part. Other than that, your metaphors in the second stanza is really good, I also really like the repetition of a few lines, it makes it feel more emotional and personal.
I don't think you could've ended this poem in a better way. The ending is great and each line in that last stanza is powerful. Overall great read!

PS this is also really similar to another poem I've written if you're interested to give feedback on https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1233948770362986537 just that this one doesn't have a happy ending

leaden turtle
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