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[old lintel]

I wondered if this was any good, image and poem 1/7

[rapid plank]

*I wondered if this

was any good, image and

poem 1/7*

- bombakarp

[lean forge]

Ohh Ok, I see.

"Oh brave ginger giant"

• it's interesting, but it doesn't get across any of the meaning of the poem in the 2nd half because of the image

"The malcious energy"

• good good, 10/10 img

"Untethered unbound"

• It's alright, but it's not really impactful. Solid 6.2/10

"This is the EGG"

• good image

"A soul who has"

• Good image, but not on theme with the "cure all ails" 8/10

"Drum beats"

• good, poem bit vague but image feels less vague 9/10

"Darkness encountering"

• good

"The court of public opinion"

• good

[old lintel]

The" this the EGG", is a reference to using older language, and therefore less "evolved", together with the proclaims vs infers, paints the axis of time and knowledge

[old lintel]

What do you mean doesnt represent with ginger giant? Yeah in this form it was more like setting the introductory scene for the poem

furlough is like a play on mechanical not having fur, and the loose meaning of furlough being leave of absence, being contained in mortal form

So the destruction of the container which has the fur, releases the energy of the soul to again join its origin

like I only knew him as his physical reprensentation, and at the moment the lack of grasp of perception caused saddness

so drives past is car and not getting it

Maybe I should have put myself in the scene

because it represents me seeing my cat been run over

[lean forge]

AH okay entirely my bad that imgs perf in that regard hshs (furlough bit)
I think the image doesn't really evoke the same emotions/tone that's said in the poem, in the image though

Especially now you've given more context

[old lintel]

true

It's the interpretation of strength

the giant added because he was ferocious and to be contended with

So it is more symbolic of strength and the agression of the act

[old lintel]

The soul who has treats all ails, is supposed to be visually represented by pushing away the water in which you are submerged drowing

not in control....

But when looking at it

I see that might be very obscured

[old lintel]

And yes unthetered was more trying a style on, so probably lacks soul

[gaunt kiln]

Wonderful! @old lintel has just pregressed to level 1!

[old lintel]

Drum beats is basically an interpretation of how I go through life, unable to say this without sounding arrogant, but having to hide capacity. But I feel like the capacity is not even part of me, but the conciousness riding as a passenger and only acting when it befits it

[lean forge]

Ah don't worry about sounding arrogant, I get it. That's interesting actually

[old lintel]

So it basically depicts the reactionary energy of his moving presence to be of high intensity, but it seems odd because physically not imposing and that is what we see. The energy potential and discrepancy with what they see, for me is natural because I can't get it contained so there would be accepted external exposure. still sounds odd