HOW DARE YOU TELL ME

[static sleet]

story about betrayal

Nice

I love it

It reminds me of Edgar Allen poe

[lime eagle]

That is an incredible compliment. Thank you!

[real jasper]

WOW! i felt every drop of emotion while reading this piece and its not an aura of love at all. the writer is actively reprimanding his loved one for thinking so little of themselves in the place of his heart. the repetition of "how dare you" really adds to the tone and intensity of building emotions. I do wish it was longer tho but well done! truly amazing work

[lime eagle]

Thank you so so much. I’m really glad you felt what I put into it. And yea I get what you mean, I tried to make it longer, but it just felt like it was dragging on a little bit. I’ll see if I can do more. :))

[real jasper]

you're very welcome! no one likes a drag lol just keep honing your talent! im rooting for you and i look forward to reading more from you