zenith gust
Has one ever wondered
How the world is so full
Has one ever questioned
Why the human being is so foul?
The Earth can't survive
Without the insects that reside
But the earth can prevail
Without humanity or their wails
It's a full discussion
As to why it could thrieve
But it's time for us to judge
What is wrong with the human being?
deft blade
I really love how apparent the message is in the poem. It's honestly so true, bees and such pollinate flowers making the world flourish while mankind just sort of pollutes it. I like that only two lines, have punctuation (?). This draws the reader's attention to whatever is being said, in this case humanities faults. I also noticed you ended each stanza with a line on humanity. I feel like the ending lines in stanzas are meant to be the most memorable, conclusive parts of a poem so that really drives home the focus being humans are the issue. I'd even say the lack of poetic devices being used really works with this poem. It's simple and to the point. Great work! ❤️
zenith gust
Thank you!
zenith gust
I really love how apparent the message is in the poem. It's honestly so true, be...
Can you check my new poem, by the way?
deft blade
I'm at work rn but I'd love to check it out when I get home!