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[vague hound]

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[mental wagon]

Just a spelling error but
"But what if my heart refuse" -> "but what if my heart refuses" is what I think was intended.

[vague hound]

😭😭bruh yea thanks

[mental wagon]

I find it difficult to critique prose because I don't want to change the original meaning. Very well written poem.

[gentle mist]

weird part.

but what if my heart refuses
refuses to be home
refuses to be alone
refuses to find a new home

it doesn't make sense.

[drowsy wharf]

Actually I think she expressed the thousands of questions thats going on in her head... Which isnt.. Weird at all

[vague hound]

oh I get it's a bit contradictory but the poet is confused given her past

[drowsy wharf]

Btw @vague hound posted!

Yeah!

[gentle mist]

the difference you need to understand.

contradictory is like the exact opposite.

[vague hound]

u r so sweet I can't

[drowsy wharf]

@vague hound it's a bit heartbreaking to see this one. I've seen another poetry today where he felt trapped in his home too..
Many peoples are feeling that way these days.. This is so sad

[drowsy wharf]

Oh.. Ok

[vague hound]

I hope everyone gets through their lows

[drowsy wharf]

And yours too.
I hope you find your home.
The home that you dream of.
And find peace in it.
Of course with the people you love, I hope you be in that home🪺

[gentle mist]

in that part the randomness comes in. Given the statement is correct, which it is, it is a semi-directional thing. But here the poem refuses to create a contrast of beliefs or itself, which is fine in itself, but a failed contrast is worse than having none.

[vague hound]

i wrote what I felt it was not intentional tbh wtv that was spiraling in my mind

but thanks for the feedback tho

[chrome scroll]

This house aches me...
For it is too much for my needs...
Too less for me to belong in.
@vague hound Man I wish keed was here and had read this.

[loud fog]

Wonderful! @chrome scroll has just pregressed to level 18!

[vague hound]

wow

[chrome scroll]

@vague hound I know if she was here she would've said, 'wow'.

[vague hound]

[vague hound]

@south copper review this

[chrome scroll]

@south copper I wish S.K was here.

[south copper]

Damn keed
As always awesome
So smooth the words glide on each other
Btw I'm loving how you sum up the thoughts well "but what if my heart refuses to be home
Refuses to be alone"
That was my fav

The delima of non exsisting and truth of reality was so on point

I may not be good with feedback

But it was such a lovely poem

[south copper]

Don't take my name
Just call me SK brother

[vague hound]

thank you here's a flower 🌷 for you

[south copper]

You are pretty good with memory tho

[south copper]

I would like to present you a bouquet 💐 then
Thanks
I took the flower nd will cherish it

[chrome scroll]

I have many powers, some are considered to be super-natural.