I’m thirsty for my own water

[next nebula]

Such a beautiful poem, makes me give even my veins to you.

[wanton rover]

omggg thank you so muchhhh 🫶🫶🫶

[brisk trench]

Wonderful! @wanton rover has just pregressed to level 8!

[next nebula]

Wanna read something I wrote just now?

[wanton rover]

sure !!

[next nebula]

Would appreciate the feedback

https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1234832228937371698

Thank you.

[civic moss]

the best part for me is the second half of the poem, including and after the line 'I’m thirsty for my own water'. i think adding more imagery here could really help highlight the nuance of your metaphors, and add a good punch to your poem. overall, i liked parsing through this poem a lot

[brisk trench]

Wonderful! @civic moss has just pregressed to level 6!