The Gutless Poet

[deep urchin]

I have seen many a horrors, about which I cannot write,
The fear that I may make these emotions alight,
On the wrist, this knife excites.
But who am I kidding..?
It is only to protect this gutless heart of mine, my dear,
It is to avoid being tragedy's wright.

The time was such...
When I had nothing to rouse, demising espouse,
Many a bouts of those waterless douse...
It ACHES me... to think,
how one can grow so old of his home,
When 17 years, passed in that same house.
.
.
.
.

Curious about my past, you be might,
I was but a plightful pawn,
With thornful ways, no armor in sight.

Had paths too many, but none to walk on....
Such a wish to die, but nothing to choke on...

The torch of hope I dare, do not ignite,
My fears I tell, I dare do not recite...
So, my dear....
Where should we begin my contrite?
Should I tell you of my falseful crimes?
When I was with her... those times?
Should I speak about these poems I write...
THESE TWO CENTS RHYMES I CITE,
listening... to these deafening chimes?
How about-.... Yes... YES...
The time....
||When enough darkness I saw, I feared the light. ||

no- nO- NO- NO!....
Pardon me for I went too far to me to eit,
I'm closing off about my past-
YOU CAN INDICT THIS STREIT...
BUT I AM A GUTLESS MAN, senor...
TO MY PAST IS ONE, I WOULD NEVER REQUITE.

Signing off- (tearing the paper)
The Gutless Poet

@still halo
@somber swan
@severe pilot
@thorn hearth
@keen shadow

@proper birch
@graceful trail
@swift raven
@drifting glade
@pastel pumice

[keen shadow]

@deep urchin Teachers love the poetry book.

[deep urchin]

@south socket
@restive pebble
@undone birch
@narrow yacht
@full radish

[keen shadow]

Currently they suggest me a website to sell these types of poetry, But the only problem is that production and efficiency hahaha.

[keen shadow]

Honest Review:

I love the story theme of the poem, It is like a novel written. Perfected by poetry.

[gilded goblet]

Wonderful! @keen shadow has just pregressed to level 11!

[deep urchin]

Did they like the idea or the works like the poetry that was in it?

[keen shadow]

I am out of energy to write a 4 paragraph long to absolutely share my thoughts and representation of the words.

[keen shadow]

Yes, Its not suggested online because of pirating.

[deep urchin]

Bruh elaborate

[keen shadow]

Okay, In short. They do not suggest a online written poetry book mainly because of the risk of it being stolen possibly. And the lack of recognition, So it might not make big money.

[deep urchin]

You give me my first share of profit and I'll split the work with you.

[deep urchin]

yeah you should print it out

[keen shadow]

Plan it on?

[deep urchin]

Like I have one and it's literally called, "The Greatest Poems of all Time."

[keen shadow]

👍

@deep urchin Dm's

[narrow yacht]

Pardon me for I went too far to me to eit,

eit?

[deep urchin]

An interrogation thingy to get out information

Pardoned.

@brittle prairie Can I have your feedback?

[brittle prairie]

Hmm?

Alright, I’ll look.

[narrow yacht]

that piano put me to sleep.

tbh, imo, this is not much.

[deep urchin]

Bro spitting facts

[narrow yacht]

*Curious about my past, you be might,
I was but a plightful pawn,
With thornful ways, no armor in sight.

Had paths too many, but none to walk on....
Such a wish to die, but nothing to choke on...

The torch of hope I dare, do not ignite,
My fears I tell, I dare do not recite...
So, my dear....
Where should we begin my contrite?
Should I tell you of my falseful crimes?
When I was with her... those times?
Should I speak about these poems I write...
THESE TWO CENTS RHYMES I CITE,
listening... to these deafening chimes?
How about-.... Yes... YES...
The time....*

I think I only like this part.

[deep urchin]

Bruh you don't have to force yourself to like stuff. I'm glad that you thought to gave it a read once.

[narrow yacht]

im sorry

[deep urchin]

bro...

[thorn hearth]

Signing off- (tearing the paper)
The Gutless Poet

Such a mood

[narrow yacht]

I have read too many poems is my problem.

[brittle prairie]

I’m reading it again to be sure of my review.

[deep urchin]

Thank you my spokes-person make sure to say it in the interview.

[deep urchin]

Bruh...

[edgy hare]

Look, man... Your word order

sucks

imo

[deep urchin]

Another bro spitting facts

[edgy hare]

I like your poetry when you write in normal English word order, but when you change it you get all sloppy and messy

and not in an endearing, artistic way, but in more of a I don't know what I'm doing way

[brittle prairie]

I did not understand the third paragraph, and the last. It is a chaotic poem in my opinion, and some in-line rhymes just seemed to be used here to make a sad poem sound better and happier? I’ll try to make constructive critique now.

[edgy hare]

My advice, read some Shakespeare, some Duckinson, maybe even Whitman imitate their poems. You'll start to pick up on what makes good poetic word order, trust me.

I know, reading old poems sucks, but it has to be done lol

[spare aspen]

*I know, reading old

poems sucks, but it has to

be done lol*

- calebr123

[graceful trail]

Aaron Warner could relate
just because I love him, I love this poem too gud one

[thorn hearth]

Sir I'll take extra charges for that💸

[brittle prairie]

How much of the poem was planned, if any of it?

[deep urchin]

None was planned, I thought of all of it while taking a shower.

[deep urchin]

Man, I wish keed was here, no matter how much she hates me for putting dhaniya in chai, she would've liked this poem and would've said something like, "Aaron Warner could relate
just because I love him, I love this poem too gud one"

[deep urchin]

I appreciate and understand your concern and with all due respect which is none but still as a grateful person, I don't like to read other people poem's that much except for a selective few including you, because if I read too much of a person, I become that person (at least that's what Nietzsche said).

[deep urchin]

*takes out cash

*increases your salary by 1 cent.

[edgy hare]

Interesting philosophy, I guess... Can't really blame you, but I can assure you that you won't get very far with that attitude. I wish you luck!

[deep urchin]

Thank you, I do not intend to go far for I am already at the finish line.

New theme:

@narrow yacht

[graceful trail]

huh!

[deep urchin]

I wish keed was here, she would've replied to my mention with a 'huh!'

[spare aspen]

*I wish keed was here,

she would've replied to my

mention with a 'huh!'*

- some_random_person

[deep urchin]

If Haiku bot gives this a side-eye then he misses keed as well even though she was annoying af @graceful trail

[graceful trail]

"as well" mhm i see

[deep urchin]

man she would've replied with a, '"as well" mhm i see' even though I just missed making fun of her.

[still halo]

They did!?

[deep urchin]

Bruh Boetica you gonna be a busy man in one year.

[still halo]

I might have to agree with what the others are saying here.
Though the qualities are evident here.
It feels cluttered and very much like splashing paint aimlessly.

I'm not one to say about directionless poetry, my rival.
But there's definitely much better methods you can choose.

Respect for the expermentation, though.
You are clearly testing the waters here I see,
But I think you'll have to refine this style better.

I know for a fact you can write hard-hitting and visually striking poems.
But this one feels like a drummer mindlessly bashing sticks together.

In regards,
Poetica.

[still halo]

My good sir, I am eighteen.
This is already a busy year for me.
By 2025, I shall be silver-haired.

[graceful trail]

@thorn hearth huh

[deep urchin]

Man she would've repliied with a 'huh'

tagging ummm

[deep urchin]

I appreciate the feedback bruh, I think that I need to give a little context cause not everybody can sit inside my head and had interactions with the thoughts I had when I wrote this (although I did so in the shower.)

[thorn hearth]

Ouch! Sir you so cheap

[still halo]

Things ain't cheap anymore sadly...

[deep urchin]

Then we can say that silver haired people write exponentially well.

[thorn hearth]

hehe.

[still halo]

Ah yes, Poetica the Silver-Haired Glimmer.

[deep urchin]

What umm why you talking to air

[deep urchin]

ahhaha

[thorn hearth]

Who increases salary 1 cent?

[deep urchin]

I can sense our battle to be legendary.

[deep urchin]

My bad, *deducts 0.5 cents

You happy now? @thorn hearth

[still halo]

I sense my time is nearing.

[thorn hearth]

@graceful trail take the lead. You can be his spokesperson

I respectfully resign

[graceful trail]

I WOULD RATHER DIE

[deep urchin]

By this piece though I did want to convey that the poet is so scaredy catsy that he doesn't have the guts to confront his past and is unable to talk about it fully, stuttering and making it all foggy to explain and in the last stanza he realized that as he went with the flow he was nearly around confronting his past by telling it to the readers so he stops immediately because he doesn't want to feel those same damn emotions again and by stopping as said in the last second stanza's last line, he had encountered such gut-renching moments which unfortunately he would've revealed if he had continued writing but didn't. He does in the last second stanza talks about and gets comfortable by asking the reader where should he start telling about his past. And in the first few stanzas he gave a little teaser about his past, "It is to avoid being tragedy's wright. " By this he means that if he were to convey his past or write about the horrors that he saw, he would become so extremely saddened that he might become tragedy itself and doesn't know what he might do. "The fear that I may make these emotions alight,
On the wrist, this knife excites." In this he is scared that by talking about his past he might get rid of some emotions that he has now and in a previously written poem by me "https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1231636523213131867" I mentioned the lines, "Who am I without my pain, Who am I without my pain" so that explains that.
I don't think, there is much left to explain, I mean this is all what I thought while writing it down (most of it cause I had more severe ideas revolving inside my head at the time).

[deep urchin]

@edgy hare

[deep urchin]

@smoky perch

[deep urchin]

You asked for something else, I did something else, It turned out something else and people thought of it as something else.
Bruh what a life.

[deep urchin]

@cosmic solstice Sry for pinging you, I just thought- idk what, sry

[deep urchin]

@full radish Your thoughts pls bro.

[full radish]

I liked this line - "When enough darkness I saw, I feared the light." its very well written and successfully captures sense of despair and vulnerability

imagery good too! vivid and evocative also the phrases like thornful ways and waterless douse was really good gives a little stark of struggles and adds depth to the poem

[deep urchin]

Thanks for the feedback as always dude!

[deep urchin]

@jolly zodiac

[deep urchin]

@hybrid patio

[hybrid patio]

this is insane

incredible

way beyond me

[deep urchin]

nah man it's still in your league

You just gotta try harder.

[hybrid patio]

I dont know, maybe its the process with which I go about?

I spend a long time on these poems I* write

[jolly zodiac]

Really a nice poem dude

[restive pebble]

I really like your poem, I must say

Perfect, your poems are perfect

[deep urchin]

You humble me, Mrs. Este.

[keen shadow]

Make sure you do not die next year thats all😆

[deep urchin]

@verbal palm I know you bruh.

[deep urchin]

@severe pilot Bruh I totally forgot your username for a sec. Wanna review this?

[somber swan]

Okay I am free now

Time to critique mr Perfect

[deep urchin]

Who dahell are you?

[somber swan]

Dhaniya Chai wala

[deep urchin]

Ahhh Man did I wait for ya.

Hope!!!!

I thought for a second I lost you.

[severe pilot]

Bro i have no worde fo this... This is something else...❤️

[deep urchin]

Thanks bro. Appreciate it.

[severe pilot]

I really mean it

[jolly zodiac]

How are you perfect ?

[severe pilot]

Well I don't write English poetry.. but i can understand every single word...

[deep urchin]

I see

[severe pilot]

Hope.. wby...

[deep urchin]

Just like my name suggests.

[severe pilot]

Glad to hear that

[deep urchin]

ahaha how about you man?

[jolly zodiac]

Sufi. !!! I am all good

Hru ?

[somber swan]

First line “seen many a horrors” error. “These two cents rhyme i cite” poetica influencing you . The gutless poet is here, and here to stay.

[severe pilot]

So should i also say just like my name😂

I'm listening to my playlist

[severe pilot]

Good bro...

[deep urchin]

Listen up people, I do not know who this man is or what is he high upon writing this.

[deep urchin]

Sukhi bhai sukhi hona chaiye

[somber swan]

Real

[severe pilot]

Someday

[deep urchin]

It'll last for forever

[somber swan]

@deep urchin im gonna write a poem, probably similar to this.

[deep urchin]

Just ask Neko

[somber swan]

Why me

[deep urchin]

I see you're getting inspired my kitty.

[somber swan]

Yes, tons of inspiration

[deep urchin]

Says the guy who called the first line of my emotional breakdown an 'error'.

[somber swan]

Bro the letter a shouldnt be there

[deep urchin]

Where is the letter a?

Oh that?

Bruh that is how someeone communicated in the old poetry's I forget the author's name though.

[somber swan]

Oh nvm then

[deep urchin]

Bruh you made me sad Neko

I'm thinking of writing on you again.

[somber swan]

[deep urchin]

@drifting glade @thorn hearth @graceful trail

[somber swan]

Perfect-san forgive me

[deep urchin]

What should I do jury?

[drifting glade]

Yes ?

[deep urchin]

Bruh.

[somber swan]

You are not a man, you are THE MAN. The guy fr

[deep urchin]

I see you buttering me.

More ahhahaha do it MORE NECKO-CHAN ahahha

*coughs

[somber swan]

Im the bread

[deep urchin]

*chokes

*dies

[drifting glade]

@graceful trail keed really went invisible

[somber swan]

So fast what

[deep urchin]

*Makes a binding vow with God and revives himself

[deep urchin]

Pack your bags @drifting glade We're going to Shimla with @somber swan 's money

[somber swan]

Perfect with that god complex

[somber swan]

[drifting glade]

Okay lessssgoooo

[deep urchin]

Don't call it a 'God Complex'. There's nothing complex about it.
I AM GOD.

[deep urchin]

@stuck wagon

[somber swan]

https://tenor.com/view/kanye-a-god-i-am-a-god-kanye-west-conceited-gif-5313292

[deep urchin]

Man Kanye was the second name of confidence once upon a time.

[somber swan]

He still is with his new project

[deep urchin]

Nah man, he's done. You are the new word for confidence. Necko-Toffee-Chan.

[somber swan]

Honorary

[deep urchin]

If I'm God then you are my messenger.

You are the messiah.

You are the avenger.

[somber swan]

[drifting glade]

BYE GUYS NEED TO GO .. GETTING LATE FOR INTERNSHIP

@deep urchin @somber swan

[deep urchin]

Have fun man. Hope it turns out good.

[somber swan]

Good luck!

[deep urchin]

My best wishes are with you.

[pastel pumice]

Old poems rock ❤️

This was gut wrenching and heartfelt, but it reads more as prose than a poem

[spare aspen]

*This was gut wrenching

and heartfelt, but it reads more

as prose than a poem*

- eveline_41282

[pastel pumice]

Good bot

[deep urchin]

@severe pilot

[deep urchin]

@severe pilot (explanation)

[deep urchin]

@severe pilot Song

[severe pilot]

I already told you song
I can't play

[deep urchin]

Why?

[severe pilot]

I have already read it

I take my words back

You aren't good with memory

[deep urchin]

*sighs

I do not mean to flex but-

nevermind

[severe pilot]

You tagged me in all
I have read all

We had a discussion about why I like the first one in series more

[deep urchin]

*pats your head

[severe pilot]

Okay

[deep urchin]

.

[drifting glade]

@deep urchin @graceful trail @severe pilot Want tea ? Some Dhaniya tea ?

[drifting glade]

@thorn hearth you also want tea ?

damn
All slept

Damn Tomorrow is national holiday....why you all slept too early ....

@deep urchin @severe pilot @graceful trail @thorn hearth

[graceful trail]

what national holiday

[edgy hare]

They do, but I had to try to convince him lol

[gilded goblet]

Wonderful! @edgy hare has just pregressed to level 10!

[edgy hare]

It did not work

[severe pilot]

Ak
Brother you are here
You were missed

[severe pilot]

If it's prepared by you

[severe pilot]

I have class tomorrow
4 classes

[gilded goblet]

Wonderful! @severe pilot has just pregressed to level 12!

[drifting glade]

Nah , its prepared by some pirates from Mars

[drifting glade]

💀

[deep urchin]

Sup man

you got the goods?

@drifting glade

@graceful trail Man do I wish Keed was here.

https://open.spotify.com/track/36l11ZCwWddF6JMAaS9CcT?si=31475b5332bb4cb9

[severe pilot]

Then I'm not having it

[swift raven]

This out of my field of work, I'd just rate and tell you about places to improve and leave as I am not sure if I am good enough in this context. Overall this poem is 6.5/10, vocabularistic experiments would work, metaphors and imageries needs lots of work, typography is good however I would've used en dashes more, lastly, I would say overall this poem needs a good thorough revision. This is what I think, other people's perspective may vary so take it with a grain of salt

[deep urchin]

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