#I gave myself a desert in the sky

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rustic fractal
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I gave myself a desert in the sky
To soak with tears that never said goodbye
I watered it, but green it wouldn’t be
Instead, the muddy sand, it laughed at me

I offered up instead a cup of blood
to soak the soil with love I bottled up
It reddened all the soil beneath my feet
Then came a gush of wind and covered it

Defeated, I fell down to wait for clouds
Though, none would come, despite my harrowed shouts
But, far away, I heard a blue bird sing
While carrying the promises of spring

No grass grows on the steep hills of my past
But hope might show its mighty face, at last

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@daring terrace Oops, see I didn't get the rhyme scheme right, but the meter's been improved.

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@blazing trail
@blazing trail
@dusky umbra
@thick kiln
@ripe vigil

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@stone saddle
@arctic patrol
@cloud pivot
@craggy elm
@gentle pine

blazing trail
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i love this aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa thatsNARVirl

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good job evie

thick kiln
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Though, none would come, despite my desperate shouts

Not a sonnet anymore.

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While carrying the promises of spring

9 syllables/

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@icy prism help

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!haiku help syllables

icy prismBOT
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Help
Syllables

!haiku syllables [message]: Counts the number of syllables in a message.
[message]: The message to count the syllables for.

thick kiln
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!haiku syllables Though, none would come, despite my desperate shouts

icy prismBOT
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Though, none would come, despite my desperate shouts: 11 syllables

thick kiln
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The sonnet is not a sonnet.

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Smh.

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i like the poem. But it is like still too vague to think what it is about.

rustic fractal
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I counted desparate like des-pret

rustic fractal
glass geyser
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playing with langauge is allowed haha

rustic fractal
rustic fractal
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Thanks ❤️ i tried to keep it iambic pentameter cause it's a sonnet, but then realized I used the wrong rhyme scheme 🤦‍♀️