Voice

[proper cradle]

Well done!

[uncut cypress]

@tired mason
@naive plume
@proper cradle
@poetics292_.#0000

[proper cradle]

I like alphabet part

The*

[tired mason]

Seeeee

Poetics ping dosent work

!!!!

[uncut cypress]

the punctuations? are they correct?

[uncut cypress]

ty

[uncut cypress]

I thought my device was glitching

[naive plume]

The area you have to improve considerably is the end of the poem, Make it rhyme to leave a everlasting impression. Overall i am delighted with the Beginning and the Middle.

[proper cradle]

You could put voice instead of proof maybe

[uncut cypress]

ohkk noted. I'll try including that in the next one

[proper cradle]

Not sure abt existence part but i feel like it can be changed

[uncut cypress]

'these poems are the only voice of my existence'? that sounds weird

[proper cradle]

Exclude the only part

[uncut cypress]

mhm alright I'll see if I can come up with something better

[proper cradle]

Tbh i feel like adding the title at the end would give it a effect and changing the sentence

Okey

[uncut cypress]

okay I'll think bout it. ty

[tired mason]

Ohh this line - burning my eyes with permanent images, i like it, it conveys the intensity of struggles and the lasting impact of the thoughts, cool

[proper cradle]

Yw :D

[tired mason]

So beautiful!

Well written

[uncut cypress]

I was thinking about how we see the shadows of it when we directly see something too bright.

[royal plover]

Wonderful! @uncut cypress has just pregressed to level 6!

[uncut cypress]

thanks

[tired mason]

Ohh right

[uncut cypress]

Echo