#Supernova

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heavy ridge
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Dark sky, bright stars;
I still hear your voice
In the supernovas above.
It's loud and firm
Shouting a strong swarm.

Dead grass, soft earth;
I wish you were here
To witness the world rebirth.
You're gone up there
Watching every move in despair.

Warm sun, cold moon;
I vanish slowly looking up
Knowing my time is off soon.
You stare back at me
And show nebulas dead to be.

Slow death, fast pulse;
My heart pumps stardust
Yet it turns into a curse.
You're as far as Neptune
And I'm a single moon.

Strong light, weak gloom;
We fought the blackholes
Until we fused into souls.
Our spark has lit up
Shining a deep nebula spot.

Trifid_Nebula_by_Deddy_Dayag.jpg
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@distant knot @molten dagger @silver mesa @slow tree

lean inlet
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I just love space, beautiful poem. And a beautiful rhythm.

opal holly
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The first line of each stanza, has two contradictory subjects, it adds much more depth to the poem, I like it. The prompt is quite interesting, I might say, you have your way of expressing your emotions and you do it pretty perfectly.

I really liked the line "my heart pumps stardust yet it turns into a curse" The juxta is amazing.

The imagery is so vivid. The rhymes are sweet and the rhythm flows smoothly. I liked this one. 8/10.

molten dagger
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Shouldnt it be "lit" ?

heavy ridge
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oops 😔

heavy ridge
heavy ridge
molten dagger
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9/10

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One of your best smh

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But no narration, western sad

heavy ridge
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LMAO

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TYY

turbid sluice
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I like the imagery!