waiting on the last favors of god

[willow warren]

ohh i was lurking over this one earlier, and also i look at the advice you give others

you listen your own advice and that ive got total respect for

whats also great is you understanding the difference between God and god and using it appropriately

[green smelt]

My only feedback really is to try and use stanzas or a concise structure more, other than that, well done!

[willow warren]

ohmygod riaan in chat

[sudden basin]

Appreciate the feedback. But in more modern poetry it's not uncommon to have a poem as one continuous structure/stanza.

[green smelt]

Yeah ofc, in that case good job

[green smelt]

Hi 😅

[hasty locust]

It's been awhile since I've read a poem from a farmer's perspective. I liked it a lot. My main feedback would be to look over the verbs you use in the poem and consider increasing the strength of them. I suggest cutting down the use of linking verbs as much as possible as it can dilute your verbs potency.

[sudden basin]

I try very hard. I get hyper fixated on language mostly. I went to school for creative writing. I can never figure out how to get my poetry to readers though. I have written around 500 poems.

[sudden basin]

I do think I understand what you mean about making it more concise though.

[sudden basin]

Can you point out the linking verbs?

It's been a while since I've taken a grammar class. Also I'm tired

[steady pagoda]

*It's been a while since

I've taken a grammar class.

Also I'm tired*

- dove.zzzz

[sudden basin]

Oh no. A haiku bot

[sudden basin]

It's the capital G god but stylistically I avoid capitalization because of how it interrupts the line.