A window to eternity

[grizzled dawn]

In the soft contours of your splendid face,
Radiates a beauty that's boundless in grace.
An aurora that never fades away,
A charm that warms the heart each day.

Your eyes, stars in a tranquil night,
In their glow, a beauty takes flight.
Radiance that illuminates my soul,
In a dance of light, making me whole.

Each smile, a sun rising anew,
On your lips, sweetness rings true.
And as I gaze deep into your eyes,
A window to your heart, where love lies.

In this landscape of unmatched delight,
I find the beauty that fills my sight.
In the warmth of your embrace, a gentle lair,
Where love blooms with each loving stare.

Thus, immersed in your enchanting grace,
I discover the essence of a sacred embrace.
And in your eyes, the purest truth I see,
A window to eternity.

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@rapid gull

@lament grove

@ivory dragon

@lavish sail

@devout fiber

@ocean spindle

[devout fiber]

Not fair.

Where is the part 1, I wanna read that too.

@grizzled dawn

[lavish sail]

Wow what a magnificent piece you of work!! I really love ❤️ how you described the delicacy of a heart and the connection with you and your soulmate. How long have you been writing poetry for?

[grizzled dawn]

Aaw yes

[ocean spindle]

I love this. I like how you use vivid imagery to capture the way you see this person and your love for them

[grizzled dawn]

I tag you

[grizzled dawn]

Since i fineshed the first par, thank for your review!

[grizzled dawn]

Ty man, the love is in everything is beautiful in the world

[lament grove]

the rhymes are very standard for a love poem aabb
the verses are somewhat irregular in the last stanza
- - / - / - - / - /.
- / - - / - / - - /.
- - / - / - / - /.
- / - / - / - /.
something like that I could scan in the first stanza, looks somewhat regular
the imaginery is good, I like simple good old love poems
4th stanza full of adverbials a burden to read

7/10

[grizzled dawn]

Understand

Só

Can i tag you in another?

I think you will be like

[lament grove]

I like this rico

But I must say for me this gets overshadowed by the 1st part

That’s just lovely.

[grizzled dawn]

Loll glad

The first part is my masterpiece

[lament grove]

Yeaa

[lament grove]

It issss

That’s perfect

And tbh

I would even say it’s perfect without the second part

The second one can be a completely new one

[grizzled dawn]

I GOR IDEIA

[lament grove]

Whattt?

[grizzled dawn]

A window to eternity

[grizzled dawn]

I got a ideia

Read now

The end

[lament grove]

Okey lemme see

Dude

Perfect now

So now it has nothing to do with the 1st

Plus the 1 stands alone as ur finest work

One of em at least

[grizzled dawn]

Haha if you say

[lament grove]

It is dude

Literally

From the ones I’ve read

[grizzled dawn]

Hahah is a lovelly poem really

[devout fiber]

Oh, i read this one.

I think the meter can improve but other than that, nice one.

7.3/10.

[grizzled dawn]

Ty man

[rapid gull]

beautiful love poem, great job

[grizzled dawn]

@shell dawn

Its not a continue

Its just a way to use window