#The autumn leaves

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lusty spindle
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The autumn leaves rest on the oak tree,
shivering ever so slightly near the bees,
the winds move rapidly like trains at eve,
as hawks scattered around the oak tree.

With nothing but eggs in their tiny domes,
as the autumn leaves spread like wildfire,
in vast numbers roaming the green plains,
as they stumbled upon wheat fields in vain.

The autumn leaves gaze at the sunflowers,
with dry roots on their wilted brown hues,
in spite of their depressing and sad news,
they went for a haunt so they can snooze.

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@keen kayak

lusty spindle
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@flat roost

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@rustic basin

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@idle birch

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@dreamy wadi

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@thorny thorn

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@dusky gazelle

lusty spindle
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@sterile pier

sterile pier
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It has a lovely ring and youre good at metaphors with mother nature

But my petty self is counting syllables again and you're not adhering to your own rhythm 😄

coarse bluffBOT
lusty spindle
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cause I didnt like how it flow at first

sterile pier
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as a tip, when writing your first stanza, write the amount of syllables next to your line and try to stick to it

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The autumn leaves rest on the oak tree, 9
shivering ever so slightly near the bees, 11
the winds move rapidly like trains at eve, 8
as hawks scattered around the oak tree. 8

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try to have verses rhyming with each other adhering to the same amount of syllables, a break ( like - this) counts as 1 syllable

lusty spindle
sterile pier
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aaah dont mind me then 😄

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im just a sucker for classical verses

lusty spindle
sterile pier
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theres beauty in order to me

lusty spindle
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Ok i see

lusty spindle
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@split haven

thorny thorn
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Poems full of Autumn's essence. The imagery is soo vivid too.
Use of trees bees winds and sunflowers was very good.
Nicee

lusty spindle
keen kayak
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Nice

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Good stuff

lusty spindle
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wait till u read sunflowers

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now that one is fire

tidal beacon
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With nothing but eggs in their tiny domes,
as the autumn leaves spread like wildfire,

pure gold

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7.5/10.