A poet that lies deep in my green heart

[warm axle]

A poet that loves to rhyme,
A poet that loves to write,
a poet that has free time,

A poet that loves to read,
a poet that gives back,
a poet that is not mean,

A poet that I can go back to,
a poet that never says no,
a poet that I can relate to,

This poet loves me for who I am,
this poet makes me smile,
this poet gives me freedom,

A poet that lies deep in my green heart.

[wind lotus]

Oh man

I actually just love this

It’s perfect

[warm axle]

thank you I know its too simple but it express my message perfectly

tho

[wind lotus]

Yeh it really does

But I don’t think a poem has to be written in a complex way to be good

[warm axle]

yeah true true lol ! did u hear the 2 songs

[wind lotus]

Oh I just came back from outside

Can u say which one it was again ?

[warm axle]

oh ok

[wind lotus]

Sry

[warm axle]

ariana just like magic and west side

[warm axle]

no worries

[wind lotus]

Okay I will listen rn

[warm axle]

👍

[wind lotus]

Okay so the first song just like magic isn’t bad

I like west side too

[warm axle]

yeah there are good I am glad u like it

[wind lotus]

Like normally high pitched female vocals are very unpleasant to my ears

But here I don’t mind em

[warm axle]

yeah but she like rapping on both of those songs

sometimes she may rap and sing on the same track

[wind lotus]

I see

So in the hook she sings

But then has two verses?

[warm axle]

yeah and she use alot of layers and adlibs

[warm axle]

yeah

[wind lotus]

Yup I heard the Adlibs

They were placed cleverly

[warm axle]

yeah she is one artist that know how to layer well

and do adlibs

[wind lotus]

And whoever mixed and mastered the songs

They stacked the vocals pretty well

[warm axle]

yeah

in my 2 poems i wrote , i changed some of the lines around

and some words

[wind lotus]

Dude ur changing me I never thought I’d be chilling on a dc server complimenting Ariana 💀😭😭

[wind lotus]

Oh interesting

[warm axle]

LOL

[wind lotus]

Hm

Which poems?

[warm axle]

so if u read https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1225731369150316615 https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1225749902693498910

[wind lotus]

Yea?

[warm axle]

yeah u would notice a big difference ins ome of the stanzas

they flow a lot better

[wind lotus]

Okay I will read em again

[wind lotus]

Alright

I will see

[warm axle]

ok

[robust copper]

Simple and conscise

[warm axle]

yes and it explains the meaning very well

[wind lotus]

Yup

They are different

It’s written very nicely

It’s like fun to read

[warm axle]

yess thank you

[wind lotus]

Ur welcome^^

Btw can I send u a poem ?

I’d like ur opinion on it

[warm axle]

yes sure

[wind lotus]

Should I just dm u?

[warm axle]

?

[wind lotus]

Sry I meant dm

[warm axle]

oh u can send it here

is it personal ?

[wind lotus]

Alright

[wind lotus]

I’ll just delete it after then

[warm axle]

ok

[wind lotus]

Here

[warm axle]

wow this beautiful great job ! i think u meant um it would keep them buried

not it would keep it them buried

[wind lotus]

Ohhh the it

[winter cedar]

Wonderful! @wind lotus has just pregressed to level 6!

[warm axle]

and the personification here for moon is really good here

[wind lotus]

Yeh sry

Ur right

[wind lotus]

Thanks a lot

:)

I appreciate it

[warm axle]

yes no problem u should post your work in post own

[wind lotus]

Meh I don’t really like to post my work. I don’t think it’s deserving to be read yet

[warm axle]

oh i see but its really really good

[wind lotus]

Thanks :)

Well if there are any other poems which I think u would like

I will send em to u

[warm axle]

Ok !

@silver scroll

@hexed robin

[wind lotus]

Btw could you @ me on ur poems?

So I don’t miss em

Like the new ones u post

[warm axle]

sure no problem

[wind lotus]

Okey thanks