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brittle haven Apr 1, 2024, 5:04 AM

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A soon one to come is "The Night"

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This will be a story of a boy that was ||Abused|| there will be more poems linked to this story the story is called "The fire within" I hope you like it in each of the poems linked to the fire within story i will comment on my post to tell you stay updated and be free to dm me i work hard on these

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@gilded warren

gilded warren Apr 1, 2024, 5:15 AM

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It’s a lovely poem honestly, critically speaking then few words could be changed, the ending seems a bit to anti-climactic owing to the the intensity of the rest of the poem, could do with a bit of tweaking on the structure too.

brittle haven Apr 1, 2024, 5:15 AM

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gilded warren It’s a lovely poem honestly, critically speaking then few words could be changed...

Thanks you

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im new to being a poet

brittle haven Apr 2, 2024, 7:06 PM

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