#ALL SHADES OF BLACK

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foggy turtle
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I was just a mere kid when my heart went grim,
Cheap was the pen that is responsible for this sin.
They say that light and dark coexist at the same time,
But if I accept that, then it would be a lying crime.

Oh, I was a lively student when I heard about love,
But to my grim heart, love was yet another myth.
They say that light and dark coexist at the same time,
But if I were to say the truth, my heart is only filled with black crude.

Oh, my mind pure and serene fighting against the light and dark,
Only to get polluted by my heart that knows nothing but grim stark.
They say that light and dark coexist at the same time,
Uff, it's getting hard for my grim heart to commit another poetic crime.

I was just a new mere poet when I began to embrace the grim,
Such is the state of my mind that used to be calm and serene.
At the end of the day, it's true and I know that,
For me and my mind, the grim is now what never betrays.

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foggy turtle
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@indigo mist what do you think about this?

indigo mist
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I'll read in a few alr?

foggy turtle
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okk

twin dawn
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breaker

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has arrived

foggy turtle
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my biggest enemy

twin dawn
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no, sorry but theres no competition

foggy turtle
twin dawn
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nah lol forget about it

foggy turtle
short comet
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A beautiful poem. They imagery is vivid. Metaphors nice. Like the play of word here. And also like the comparisons you made. The repetition of the word "grim" And the phrase "light and dark coexist... " Enhances the concept of this poem. The vocab is sweet and simple but you could try out some different words with same meanings to give more depth to this poem. Good job.

foggy turtle
pure hull
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This has good meaning, very deep, nice descriptions, good words.