#Ruby Franke’s Case

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Disgusting, horrendous, shocking, and sad,
This case is ridiculously mad.
Who were a viral sensation YouTube family,
Turned into extreme insanity!

As a mother of six has gone possessed,
This had led to her eventual arrest.
She has been tormenting her youngest two kids.
Despite the fact that god forbids!

Ruby Franke believes the world is evil,
Where there is a constant threatening devil!
The relentless abuse for over an year before her arrest,
Had left R and E malnourished and depressed!

By forcing her three youngest children to clean a grave,
I cannot even imagine the pain and torture by being slaves!
By abusing her nine and twelve year old in living hell,
She claims that it’s the only way they will get well.

She detained them through handcuffs and ropes,
Restraining and restricting their souls and hopes.
Wrapping duck tape around all four extremities,
Both brother and sister are bound with no disparities!

Ruby
“You want me to feed you and bathe you?”
“Ask the devil to feed you,
Ask the devil to help you!”
“The demon is still there.”

E
“I’d rather jump into a cactus, than obey your commands!”

Despite the fact that R has urinated and defecated himself,
Ruby only stresses the foul language pouring out of his mouth!
“Pee, poo, damage, it’s all that he does!”
There ain’t no way she still believes it’s a buzz.

Ruby
“R is defiant, abusive, and mean!”
There was no escape in-between.
“R responds to poking, pouring water, and whipping!”
His life is full literally crippling and slipping!

No wonder this woman is insanely evil!
The mistreatment and cruelty is overwhelmingly worse than the actual devil.
Even she forced her husband out the door!
With no contact with all his kids for thirteen months more.

Ruby
“Soul killing infection in my child.”
“Five hours of pulling weed.”
“Sweating in the sun!”
“Working while thirsty!”

What do y’all think? Did I use quotation correctly?

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Part 2:

She is a wretched, evil, immoral woman!
That treats her flesh and blood like no human.
Working with Jodi her so-called therapist and business partner,
She had taken away her children’s charter.

The gut-wrenching abuse and neglect she provided,
Will forever keep her family divided!
The trauma within the shattered hearts,
Will forever leave the deepest scars as their new life restarts.

As her twelve year old, R escaped,
His wrists and angles are finally untaped!
As he sought help from neighbours who called for police,
He finally was able to fight for peace!

Upon arrival of police,
They discovered who seems to be a little boy trapped inside Jodi’s grand mansion.
Little did they know it’s a girl in despair!
Due to the fact that Ruby Franke shaved off her hair!

As her journal was exposed in scars,
She was sentenced to four to thirty years behind bars imposed.
Even though she pleaded guilty to all four counts with no excuse,
She will forever be remembered as a devil for extreme child abuse!

A once large and wholesome family,
Has became a shattered, scared, and lonely family.
Always remember child abuse is real,
Every soul should be protected and heal!

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jovial galleon
jovial galleon
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Fumbled the ending a bit sorry 😅

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And will make it more likely to get feedbacks

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I liked the first part more than the 2nd I think the ending can be a bit more shocking after telling such a strong story the ending is a little weak

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Is there any spesific feedback u lookin for?

jovial galleon
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Ah thank you so much for narrating!!

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I was wondering if the dialogue quotation marks were embedded correctly?

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thats kind of a rushed part but maybe it can give u ideas

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Ah Icic thanks

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I guess I switched between third to second person right?

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Should you remain in the same person’s perspective when writing poetry?

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hmm I dont really know much about it but I didnt felt like it was wrong. So it blends pretty well together ımo

jovial galleon
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And what themes do you usually write

quiet jasper
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jovial galleon
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Oooh that’s a long time haha

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Would you mind sharing one of your recent poems?

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Also can you tell how long I’ve been writing poetry? Have a guess

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jovial galleon
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Wow thanks haha

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Does the first experimental one give to a better sense of what you’re writing?

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It’s like a freestyle mind map

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