I look in the mirror
Pondering a single question
Am I going in the right direction?
My mind keeps wandering late at night
Thinking of falling in love at first sight
Feeling oh so lonely
Wanting someone to hold me calmly
This love i should have never gambled
Because i lost it all, now my mind is tangled
My mind is open 24 hours it will never close
My thoughts a never ending cycle, like washing your clothes,
Sometimes i wish i knew what true love was
I think of you all the time because
Your scent lingers everywhere i go
My heart now empty with nothing to show
My soul longing for your embrace
But it seems your heart has no space
My heart been an empty space
Seems like love is a chase
I think you already know
That I regret that one time I said “No”
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smoky wadi
narrow pond
Really good.
Solid rhyme scheme
I can feel the raw emptiness, regret, and longing
"Like washing your clothes" kinda caught me off guard
Was that actually a thing from the relationship or were you trying to make a good rhyme?
Am giving another read to review it more
Oh yeah this poem is lowkey relatable, especially thr beginning. And comparing chance of love to a gambling is a really interesting metaphor.
Love being a chase is also spot on
Kinda reminds me of something conan gray would write lol
You got so close to an actual love, to the feeling of being valued
Then you took one mistep, and you now blame yourself
smoky wadi
"Like washing your clothes" kinda caught me off guard
Sorry, it’s a rhyme, it’s like also a metaphor the line rhymes with my mind is open 24 hours. It will never close, and then I added a never ending cycle like washing your clothes because there’s always clothes to wash if that makes sense like it’s just always dirty washing
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smoky wadi
Sorry it just came off like a tiny bit forced to me at the time 😅
No it’s okay because it seems really strange compared to the rest of the poem so I understand
solemn hare
I look in the mirror
Pondering a single question
Am I going in the right direc...
Like 66 said, a very relatable feeling. You did good describing the feeling of regret and loss, I love it
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