This Dome is My Home | The Art of Poetry | Page 1

shadow sapphire Mar 21, 2024, 5:12 AM

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Where am I?

I am at home.

I am on earth.

I am in my home city.

I’m in a dome.

I’m in two domes.

Earth’s dome.

My own dome.

This dome is my home.

A dome molded out of my regrets.

Shaped out of my sins.

Sculpted out of my fears.

Hollowed using my hate.

Polished using my lies.

This dome is my home

This dome is in me.

Shaped like a skull.

It is my skull.

It’s used to carry my mind.

To cradle my brain.

Inside this dome built of my doubts is positive.

The definition of positive resides in this dome of pain.

This dome is my home.

I have a hammer.

I named my hammer.

I named my hammer “Friends”.

I named my hammer “Family”.

I named my hammer “Art”.

I named my hammer everything but my regrets.

My sins.

My fears.

My hate.

My lies.

My doubts.

My hammer is also my pain.

This dome is my home.

I can’t keep living in this dome.

I raise my hammer.

I shudder.

I’m afraid.

What do I do after?

What next?

Where should I live?

Where would my home be?

This dome is my home.

No.

No, no it isn’t.

I will have to take the risk.

Life is a risk.

A gamble of fate.

This dome is my home.

I bring down the hammer.

The hammer named everything but my negative energies.

The glass shell shatters.

The pieces scatter.

I am free.

I look around me.

A world.

A canvas.

I look over a hill.

I breath.

This dome is my home.

flat path Mar 21, 2024, 9:50 AM

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Woahhh what a great poem!!!!!!! It flows as if you, the poet is still trying to process your thoughts as you’re writing. It’s so raw and real. How you used techniques like repetition was extremely powerful to the poem. I would love to hear you narrate this poem. Well done it’s an incredible poem truly 👏🏼👏🏼👏🏼

sage obsidian Mar 21, 2024, 1:59 PM

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Beautiful poem!! I love the poet’s own acceptance which contrasts his earlier fear and avoidance of his flaws.

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The hammer crashing down beautifully illustrates the shattering of a perfect visage the speaker was trying to uphold all this time.

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The ending feeling of freedom afterwards is such a cathartic end to the poet’s earlier internal turmoil, and represents a sense of freedom and self-acceptance.
Deep and impactful poem. ❤️

shadow sapphire Mar 21, 2024, 9:59 PM

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flat path Woahhh what a great poem!!!!!!! It flows as if you, the poet is still trying to ...

Thanks! I was processing the poem while I wrote it actually. I like to write with no planning and with realism. I'll think of narrating this poem. Thanks for the idea!

shadow sapphire Mar 21, 2024, 10:00 PM

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sage obsidian The hammer crashing down beautifully illustrates the shattering of a perfect vis...

I'm glad you enjoyed the hammer bit!

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