poetry hiatus is done

[tame tartan]

its always me

its not you, its me
but this time, i mean it literally
its not your fault whereas this world you dont like me back
its mine, for not being the girl you wanted to have

its not me whos suffering, its you
the guilt you always come back to
but you eventually ran away from the past
whereas my past always lasts

somethings i gaslight
never run away
the sun shines and it never fades away
its like a smile thats permanent

your starting to look really weird

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[inner parrot]

I love it, it’s very freeform and unique. The lowercase, free verse and stanza spacing make it a lovely reading experience.

I might need time to do a full analysis if you’re interested. I would do so now but unfortunately I am tired and my body refuses to cooperate. (Not a critique per say, more of a reflection if anything.)

[final hull]

Damn, it's pretty straight forward, would suggest adding symbols and metaphors, plus the structure is to be revised

[tame tartan]

its still good