Dont Take Me Home | The Art of Poetry | Page 1

cosmic matrix Mar 17, 2024, 10:12 PM

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Dont Take Me Home

final basin Mar 17, 2024, 10:16 PM

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Hi!

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I see you’ve changed it quite a few times

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I guess you’ve got to feel it personally, maybe it can have a connection to the poem or deeper meaning

flat hawk Mar 17, 2024, 10:17 PM

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Fair enough

final basin Mar 17, 2024, 10:18 PM

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Personally I like choosing abstract names that have meanings that have to have some deep thought, for example #1218324013324046346

flat hawk Mar 17, 2024, 10:18 PM

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Ngl even I struggle with names sometimes if it were me I’d say u could link it to the emotion u felt it if it’s for someone try linking it to them

final basin Mar 17, 2024, 10:18 PM

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But I mean you are what you write so

flat hawk Mar 17, 2024, 10:18 PM

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final basin But I mean you are what you write so

Yea

tiny grotto Mar 17, 2024, 10:20 PM

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I keep my titles simple

final basin Mar 17, 2024, 10:21 PM

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That’s good

tiny grotto Mar 17, 2024, 10:21 PM

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I try to think about how the whole poem could be summed up in 1-3 words

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or sometimes what inspired me to write the poem could be the title

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honestly, just don't overthink it so hard

calm narwhal Mar 17, 2024, 10:24 PM

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Not a fan of repeating the same words to accomplish a rhyme

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On the 10th line, I would change "...and do not grieve" to "...not to grieve"

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"Is my life just a web that you freely weave" add question mark than a break

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On the 7th line remove the "have" from the second half of the line, it creates more emotion. Saying "you have to leave" feels as if it's due to external forces, saying "you'll leave" makes it a bit more ambiguous and can infer the person's decision to do

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I hope that helps! Good Job nonetheless!

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