Inheritance

[jagged iris]

The theme is unique ❄

[narrow frost]

ooooh I like this, it's originalll

I have to save this ^-^

[icy spade]

1: liked the creativity, vocab and changeup from the usual monotonous writing order of english
2: the occasional rhyme felt nice, though only the last one felt intentional
3: that is all, enjoyable read

[icy spade]

Imposter jess?!?!!? she didnt say "woahhh"

[pallid mason]

Holy- Shooot, is this a banger! 👏

[topaz flicker]

I like this, it's very impactful. I love the way you use repetition to add emphasis, the way you phrase the descriptions, overall giving a cold feel. very beautiful

[narrow frost]

Hmm how this is not on the starboard 😂

Let me ask you a question

Could you divide into syllables
,, Down cracked roads lits "

And how long have you been doin this poem? ^-^

[olive latch]

Dunno

[olive latch]

4 syllables

[olive latch]

I just wrote it in an hour or so if that's what you mean, it's one of my lower effort ones

[narrow frost]

Ohh okay

[olive latch]

is that not what you meant, Max?

[narrow frost]

I am think about your rythm, because I believe that first 2 lines have like so good, like examplar rythm.