{Sunshine}

[balmy swan]

Wonderful! @haughty lotus has just pregressed to level 2!

[calm plank]

Woah you can really feel the desperation in this

[wary valley]

i never understand love poems but this is one of the few that really stood out, i like the subtle rhyme between "smile" and "fine" as well as the full rhyme between "shine" and "mine". not many love poems delve into what the admired person feels, but you show that he is struggling to cope his loneliness and it hurts you to see him hurt, you are willing to sacrifice all you have just to see him happy (be it even with another girl), for what is love but wanting more for another than for yourself?

but for gods sake stop pulling gaps between the lines 😭

[haughty lotus]

Idk about it , when I write in my notes it's all fine and no gaps but when I post it here they make huge gaps 🥲

[wary valley]

✨ backspace ya sister

[outer bolt]

wow , i'm not really into romance poems , but i like the flow of this one and how well you used description ! 👌

[vestal temple]

very good poem, i think it was a little confusing in the start but good ofc, but it got very good in the end 🤌

[haughty lotus]

Thank God you didn't called me man but sister 🥲😂 .

(I'm trying to be funny༎ຶ⁠‿⁠༎ຶ)

[balmy swan]

Wonderful! @haughty lotus has just pregressed to level 3!

[wary valley]

you are muslim and you spoke of a guy in a love poem, my last two braincells worked overtime to put 2 and 2 together

[haughty lotus]

I don't think it's written somewhere that a girl can't write about a guy . And it was just my imagination and I wrote it down .

[wary valley]

no when i said your muslim and you spoke of a guy in a love poem, i deduced that you must be a female because muslim no rainbow

because earlier your bio didnt show sheher pronouns idk why

[wary valley]

ive written 2 love poems myself (not posted but secret) out of imagination as well, us people dont do that

https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1217625787142901780

[haughty lotus]

Idk I'm still learning about Islam , but I literally don't think it's bad to write about a guy/girl unless it's yk in a wild/explicit way .

[wary valley]

1: are you a convert?

2: i agree with you, by 'us people dont do that', i meant we dont relationship yknow

[haughty lotus]

No I'm Muslim by birth , and bro I'm not in any kinda relationship or will be in future because "us people don't do that" It's just I make fake scenarios about my non existing love life so I can write something sweet and good other than my sad and depressing poems .
||(Ps.my friend said you have a nice voice)||

[wary valley]

i never accused you of being in a relationship, i myself imagine a fake love life for the poems

[wary valley]

no simp

[haughty lotus]

Okay okay cool .
I don't understand what you mean by no simp . She just simply complimented you nothing else .

[wary valley]

jok

😦

[haughty lotus]

https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1217931507621036072 mind reviewing it

[covert pollen]

absolutely beautiful <3 so heartfelt i love it 💗💗

[soft totem]

Oh this ones about love too. Interesting
I liked the imagery of being deeply entangled in someone's heart and the desire to sacrifice for them. It just reflects how intense and deep the emotions are.
Overall, its a heartfelt expression of love
Well written, good!

[haughty lotus]

Dw I'll post the sad ones too 😂 . Let people enjoy the cute and sweet things first . Btw do you guys think my English is too basic . I mean I don't write like others and my sentences feel too simple.

[covert pollen]

no my poetry is like this too! if you want to, im sure you'll improve if you feel like this isn't interesting enough <3

[wary valley]

You don't need complicated words to convey emotions, but some more complex words can describe those emotions more accurately and they do sound better, just search synonyms and boom, you look 2% smarter to random people on the internet

[haughty lotus]

@tawny condor
(Hope you don't mind getting pinged)

[tawny condor]

Ping me in everything

[haughty lotus]

I guess just one more . I don't post a lot

[tawny condor]

It says it’s deleted

[haughty lotus]

You can't see the poem ?

[tawny condor]

I dm you btw