Successful

[turbid geyser]

I want to be successful in my career.
I want to live debtless.
I want to succeed in life.
I want to bring back light to the world.
All of these volitions you want to achieve but did you put any effort to succeed ?

Success is not given, it's earned with a positive mindset and hard work.
Hard work pays off when your successful in life.
If you want to go further and get more opportunities,
stop dilly dallying and start building up yourself for the future.

When you think about your goals and opportunities,
think ahead and choose your decisions wisely.
Sometimes in life a bad decision could lead to a bad reputation,
so think critically on your next course of action !

Don't let no one hold you back from your success.
Don't let friends, family nor foes put you in deficit.
Just be yourself, keep striving and you'll get it.
Good luck in your future endeavours and be the best successor !

You're still young, strong and vibrant,
so stop complaining and whining like Caillou

[idle musk]

Not sure about the end but the rest is interesting

[turbid geyser]

thanks so the last stanze im basically just saying why complain you still young u know and u got your whole life ahead of you

[idle musk]

Yeah i know im just not sure about the reference to caillou lol

[turbid geyser]

caillou has like a whining voice and tends to complain

yeah

[idle musk]

yeah ik

[turbid geyser]

so yeah thats where that reference came from

and i thought it would be clever to add it in the poem call successful

[idle musk]

Yus it is

[main ridge]

It sounds Moreee like motivating speech i mean yeahh i likeeee it

[worthy scaffold]

*It sounds Moreee like

motivating speech i mean

yeahh i likeeee it*

- daciana0511

[turbid geyser]

thanks im glad u like it

[solid dock]

great words! not sure it flows in the format of a poem, but inspiring, yes <3

[marble oasis]

Wonderful! @solid dock has just pregressed to level 1!

[turbid geyser]

thanks

[civic night]

Honestly motivational message, I like it.

Only part I find weird is the Cailiou reference at the end. This is mainly because the era is left ambiguous otherwise, so it comes out of nowhere at the end and reminds you that this is a contemporary poem. The shock is surprising, and dulls the message of your poems slightly since the beginning and middle especially hold so much emotional weight.

Aside from that, I like it! It’s a whole bunch of life lessons tied together in one cohesive poem, and serves to motivate the reader. It also paints the poet as a wise and reliable source, given that it sounds similar to what a parent would tell their child.

[turbid geyser]

well the caillou reference means that you need to stop complaining and work hard to get where you want to be in life

but thanks

[civic night]

I get it, because Cailiou’s an annoying whiny kid. I just felt the sudden reference to him be a bit jarring.

[turbid geyser]

oh yeah it felt kinda out of place from the whole poem

[civic night]

Yeah, I got the jist of the line itself, but it felt weird reading a poem that doesn’t have a defined timeframe only for it to go “boom Caillou reference” at the end lol

[turbid geyser]

yea i just felt like adding that reference in, but thanks for your support so far and feedback of my poems