Really? | The Art of Poetry | Page 1

vocal apexBOT Mar 14, 2024, 9:37 AM

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*She cries, for all but

tending kids is futile

so I asked, "Really?"*

west moat Mar 14, 2024, 10:01 AM

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Is it meant to be a haiku or just 3 lines?

graceful drift Mar 14, 2024, 10:02 AM

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Just three lines

west moat Mar 14, 2024, 10:04 AM

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Maybe u can try to work on the 2nd line for a more powerful ending

graceful drift Mar 14, 2024, 10:05 AM

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That's what I thought also. I think the punctuations are not perfect.

west moat Mar 14, 2024, 10:07 AM

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Punctuation is not really needed but for a poem intended to dwell on woman problems you can get way more detailed

graceful drift Mar 14, 2024, 10:15 AM

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Yeah, the three line limitation makes it really hard to express

lusty echo Mar 14, 2024, 12:13 PM

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Maybe you would want to add some imagery, if there is no word limit

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Purpled tears, falling, for all, "tend// your kids" a futile avail. Disbelief upon// morality asks for her truth, her reality

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