Green stars | The Art of Poetry | Page 1

timber herald Mar 12, 2024, 3:26 PM

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I see green stars,
made my life spark.

So majestic like art,
No words so I starve.

I went so far,
dreams of Mars.

You're my green star,
my shooting star.

somber garden Mar 12, 2024, 3:32 PM

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the last line could be improved a bit otherwise i liked it

timber herald Mar 12, 2024, 3:35 PM

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thank you

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still dome Mar 13, 2024, 10:44 PM

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i think for the first six lines it should be 2 3-line stanzas instead of 3 2-line stanzas

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otherwise POIFECTTTTTTTT

timber herald Mar 13, 2024, 10:45 PM

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thanksss

still dome Mar 13, 2024, 10:45 PM

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OFC

timber herald Apr 7, 2024, 6:58 AM

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@obtuse dust

obtuse dust Apr 7, 2024, 6:59 AM

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I've read this as well

timber herald Apr 7, 2024, 6:59 AM

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blursob

#Green stars