#Blight

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lucid crescent
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The world we are living in is full of blight,
a senseless act of violence that leads to a death sentence,
the world is not what it seems, it's twisted and crazy like a dream.
The blight is not just in the world, it's also in many of us,
it's horrible and terrible but that's just reality.
We face it each and every day, even though we don't want to make it a debate,
as the world turns, the blight yields and burns like smoke,
so gradually and inevitably.
The world is a movie that never stops filming,
it goes on and on till eternity, we us humans watch the world like a movie,
but we can never stop tuning in , a never ending program that makes us sick.
The world is very violent, cruel, racist and full of war and crime,
those matters we us humans have to endure on a daily basis.
Society is full of chaos and madness that will never end,
it's crazy and sad at the same time, how today's world is becoming.
The world is crumbling and crushing more and more each day like a cookie,
someday all of these problems will come to an end and the End Of The World.

fossil adder
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I’m surprised you were able to focus on writing a poem with us talking in the background lol 😭 but it came out great!

fleet groveBOT
fossil adder
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yippie level 1

lucid crescent
drifting wind
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The world we are living in is full of blight,
a senseless act of violence that leads to a death sentence,
the world is not what it seems, it's twisted and crazy like a dream.(instead of using a metaphor, you can cut it short by removing "like" so "It is a twisted and crazy dream"
The blight is not just in the world, it's also in many of us,
it's horrible and terrible but that's just reality.
We face it each and every day, even though we don't want to make it a debate,
as the world turns, the blight yields and burns like smoke,
so gradually and inevitably.
The world is a movie that never stops filming,
it goes on and on till eternity, we us humans watch the world like a movie,
but can never stop tuning in to it, a never ending program that makes us sick.
The world is very violent, cruel, racist and full of war and crime, I would suggest rewriting this like** "The world is wrathful, filled with cruelty, racism and violence. It is known for it's wars and crimes"**
those matters we us humans have to endure on a daily basis.
Society is full of chaos and madness that will never end,
it's crazy and sad at the same time, how today's world is becoming.
The world is crumbling and crushing more and more each day like a cookie, "the world crumbles more each day like a cookie"
someday all of these problems will come to an end and
The End Of The World

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I would suggest you read it out loud for any grammatical mistakes.

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Overall, i hope this is helpful (:

lucid crescent
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yes it is helpful should i edited it to that orj ust leave it

dense coralBOT
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*yes it is helpful

should i edited it to

that orj ust leave it*

- vardomc.
opaque dragon
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I love figurative

lucid crescent
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it dont have that much figurative language in it

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but i glad u like it

opaque dragon
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I think it is

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But you are the writter

lucid crescent
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yeah some there

opaque dragon
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and I love the least haha

lucid crescent
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oh the last line

opaque dragon
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The way you expressed its so clear

opaque dragon
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I really like

lucid crescent
opaque dragon
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You see it in my poems

lucid crescent
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the way i word it could mean more than 1 meaning

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so thats was clever

opaque dragon
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every poet has their way of writing, their way of feeling and putting their feelings on paper, and this makes us incredible to differ, never better but always different, the same

fleet groveBOT
lucid crescent
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lol

opaque dragon
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Haha

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I think it is

opaque dragon
lucid crescent
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i want to write a next poem and i want to title it blame

opaque dragon
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Blame

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Blame is a burden we all carry

lucid crescent
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almost a month old

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couple weeks old