basically we can write ideas then it'll go to the main post when we're finished
#The fear in love
fallen horizon
Wdy think of the title, can delete and redo it if u like
@dusk edge @sage latch
sage latch
Oh hello
fallen horizon
yes we would like u too
dusk edge
Hmm...
fallen horizon
well laini u brought the main idea
wooden marten
Wdy think of the title, can delete and redo it if u like
bro did not add me
fallen horizon
That even being with someone I'd like to learn to love, I feel like I'm alienating them
sage latch
The title is good at the moment
fallen horizon
bro did not add me
Bc you gave me bad vibes sorry
sage latch
Bruh
fallen horizon
Guys please be nice
wooden marten
dw we r nice
wooden marten
it was kinda funny wholesome
dusk edge
So, it can start off with smth like...
"It's been a couple days
Since I saw your face
"distance increases love"
or so says the phrase"
right?
u guys can continue
or make changes
wooden marten
@fallen horizon u mind me and roach do something together?
fallen horizon
wooden marten
All the best!!
dusk edge
ehh- u guys there?
fallen horizon
So, it can start off with smth like...
"It's been a couple days
Since I saw your...
yes
just trying to make the next 4 lines
dusk edge
mhm...
I'll oso try smth in the meanwhile...
Love hurts
deeper than ever
I need help, so,
I write a letter
Addressed to the depths
of my hollow heart
to save me frm love
but, I cant stay apart
fallen horizon
Recognising a fate
Most cliché as this
Attracts unwanted aches,
Neither bad or bliss
fallen horizon
Addressed to the depths
of my hollow heart
to save me frm love
but, I cant stay ...
omg ur really quick
.>
dusk edge
The intense feeling
of deep affection
Which makes me smile
at your reflection
fallen horizon
aw
dusk edge
How can I neglect it?
How can I stop?
when this feeling was
meant to drop
Oh, someday, within
my hollow heart
I might learn how
to stay apart
boreal snowBOT
dusk edge
we can call it "Hollow heart" ig... since we used it twice...
or... do u hv any other suggestions?
dusk edge
Recognising a fate
Most cliché as this
Attracts unwanted aches,
Neither bad or b...
woahhhhh- demn- tht hits harddddd
fallen horizon
Yes cause love takes away from some1
dusk edge
Yes cause love takes away from some1
hmm...
fallen horizon
woahhhhh- demn- tht hits harddddd
yea but it took me ages
fallen horizon
I was matching the opener to our collab
dusk edge
ohh... demn....
fallen horizon
Yea someone said the f word in their title it's fine
Idk how that got through LOL
Ok let's see
Hollow heart
It's been a couple days
Since I saw your face
"distance increases love"
or so says the phrase
Love hurts
deeper than ever
I need help, so,
I write a letter
Addressed to the depths
of my hollow heart
to save me frm love
but, I cant stay apart
Recognising a fate
Most cliché as this
Attracts unwanted aches,
Neither bad or bliss
The intense feeling
of deep affection
Which makes me smile
at your reflection
How can I neglect it?
How can I stop?
when this feeling was
meant to drop
Oh, someday, within
my hollow heart
I might learn how
to stay apart
"deeper than ever"
...
"I write a letter"
🥺 Aw
dusk edge
ohh- alr
dusk edge
wow...
dusk edge
alr alr
dusk edge
But tbh lovelylaini
jst call me "laini" lol...
fallen horizon
jst call me "laini" lol...
I was making it Acrostic
dusk edge
Ohhhh ok...
fallen horizon
Shal we do that?
dusk edge
I'll go with carrot lol
fallen horizon
Ok so we've hit a dry spot
dusk edge
So, carrot, wt else do we need to add?
fallen horizon
but I was just readingi t again
dusk edge
mhm...
fallen horizon
well in my experience I was rather, odd in the way I dealt with my feelings
dusk edge
huh... how? and why?
fallen horizon
I kept looking at their lips and licking my own. I was trying to flirt.
Felt a bit creepy
fallen horizon
yep
dusk edge
r u a guy or a girl? guy...ig?
fallen horizon
doesn't matter >.<
dusk edge
even if a girl does tht its... ehh- acceptable
fallen horizon
Would putting lips in the poem make it less neutral?
A love letter is more neutral than lips
Love letter's very safe
Letter*
dusk edge
when a person falls in love, they fall in love with the whole person
fallen horizon
even if a girl does tht its... ehh- acceptable
Sigh. I want to redo the past.
dusk edge
adding lips wont change it
dusk edge
Sigh. I want to redo the past.
trust me... everyone wants to do tht
fallen horizon
Ok
dusk edge
uhhuh.. uhhuh...
dusk edge
I got a rumour tht I was pregnant spreaded abt myself by mistake
fallen horizon
Maybe talk about regrets
dusk edge
it was supposed to be a prank
but... I never got the chance to tell him it was a prank
before he stormed out of my life
and told everyone in scl
it ruined my reputation
and... I loved him... or, thts wt I call it
fallen horizon
In your neighbourhood?
dusk edge
trust me... everyone wants to change their past
dusk edge
In your neighbourhood?
my school
fallen horizon
Okay sorry that happened
pale sirenBOT
Okay sorry that happened
Wonderful! @fallen horizon has just pregressed to level 7!
fallen horizon
Pregnancy is quite important
dusk edge
Okay sorry that happened
I learnt to live life on my oen terms after tht
fallen horizon
shouldn't rly joke about it to your /lover/
dusk edge
Pregnancy is quite important
idk... I proved to the ppl I need to tht it was a prank
dusk edge
shouldn't rly joke about it to your /lover/
ex-lover... I found a faaaaar better guy now...
fallen horizon
congrats
dusk edge
who wud never storm out of my life... no matter what
dusk edge
yepp
we cant txt
nor meet
bcuz, he got caught
his mom kinda saw our txts
It hurts to stay away frm him for so long
wby?
where has ur love been inspired frm?
fallen horizon
my 2nd ex inspired my lines
cause he was all about fate
I hate him
but oh well I am unemployed, have no life, it was sane to leave me
dusk edge
Ohhh... ok...
boreal snowBOT
fallen horizon
well sht
dusk edge
if it was meant to be, he wudnt hv left
fallen horizon
his mom kinda saw our txts
oh so ur like teenagers
dusk edge
I believe in soulmates and stuff
pale sirenBOT
wow... tht must be nice, right?
Wonderful! @dusk edge has just pregressed to level 6!
dusk edge
being an adult?
dusk edge
ohh...
fallen horizon
xD sorry for barging in on your conversation
dusk edge
how old r u?
fallen horizon
I just saw that and thought I had to give my opinion
dusk edge
xD sorry for barging in on your conversation
nah nah... its an open convo
fallen horizon
nearly 19
dusk edge
Ohhh... ok...
fallen horizon
and I can already say, being an adult is not fun
dusk edge
Oop-
fallen horizon
laini is it ok if i change the poem a bit to make it acrostic
Looking for a house to rent? Taxes? Studies? Work? No fun
dusk edge
ppl say its too much stress but, if u find ur goodness in between it, u can handle it
dusk edge
laini is it ok if i change the poem a bit to make it acrostic
sureee
fallen horizon
Thank ya kindly
dusk edge
Looking for a house to rent? Taxes? Studies? Work? No fun
Ohh... Idk...
u guys dont hv to ask permission to go out with ur frnds, right?
fallen horizon
Having adult money? funnnnn
dusk edge
ig thts fun... ?
fallen horizon
Imagine having friends as an adult
dusk edge
50 per poem
dusk edge
Cuz, my poems rnt rlly "gud"
fallen horizon
well it depends
dusk edge
ohh-
fallen horizon
my most expensive is 60 lol
dusk edge
hmm...
dusk edge
Okok...
Thts nice...
u seem to hv found smth fun in between ur hectic adult life too
fallen horizon
Yup but it's good you started early
dusk edge
idk how many ppl r lucky enough to hv tht
dusk edge
Yup but it's good you started early
😁😁
dusk edge
Yes that's the only fun part of my adult life lol
Thts still great...
fallen horizon
Yup!
dusk edge
✨
fallen horizon
Got dinner now, goodbye was nice talking <3
dusk edge
byeeee
@fallen horizon can u pls only leave the "affection-reflection" stanza like tht?
it has a special meaning...
I did it with him long ago...
please?
fallen horizon
<@456226577798135808> can u pls only leave the "affection-reflection" stanza lik...
What I'm doing now will be your approval
dw
I'm going to try include all your rhymes
fallen horizon
yes I hope to be done soon so if you go away I'll just post it here and @ you
dusk edge
alr alr...
its like 12.03 here so...
I gtg sleep now
I hv scl tmr
and a very important presentation too
so, adios, amigo>>
byeeeee
cyaaaaaa
fallen horizon
Goodnight take care and sleep well
dusk edge
2/7 of our inputs done
ohhh nice nice
fallen horizon
Here
It's been a couple days
Since I saw your face
"distance increases love"
or so says the phrase
Love hurts
deeper than ever
I need help, so,
I write a letter
into
I miss those coupled days,
They lit up my face;
It's the warmth he creates
Saving me the best space
Somewhere up there
On a passing Cirrus
Oh then the world casts a stare,
Dragging us down, and it hurts.
lmk what u think.
||"distance increases love"
or so says the phrase|| is going to be added later as well as the ever and letter rhymes
fallen horizon
ok done :3
||I didn't get all the rhymes but yes this is my rendition of everything||
I miss those coupled days,
They lit up my face;
It's the warmth he creates
Saving me the best place
Somewhere up there
On a passing cirrus,
Only the world casts a stare,
Dragging me down, and it hurts.
Out from where deep earth's kept,
Raised something I don't know:
My lovestruck heart, it'd swept
Away to a place to grow.
Near the tear-filled seas;
Topped up, soft and rough.
Inner capacities
Never have space enough.
Address of the depths,
Home to my hollow heart.
Openness cannot be, as
Long as life keeps us apart.
Lovelinesses: to you from limbo,
On they go; riptides to shores.
Waving on these love spores I sow;
Hope that they help the soul of yours.
Enravelling this intense feeling
Around your deepest affection
Really stuns me; I end up smiling,
Treasuring thoughts of your reflection.
||I can work at it again to add more of your rhymes - maybe I didn't try hard enough - and if so lmk|| @dusk edge
Poetry takes time huh
I didn't include "phrase," "ever," 😦 "letter," ||smh|| "stop," and "drop," ||(although I actually tried to do this in the early lines - will check to see where)||
||oops nvm my Word pad didn't let me go back that far lol||
Self critic: Line 10 could be Rose not Raised. Wdyt?
After wy fully t ofc
I think I erased a lot of your thought process tbh but that's where we needed to stay collaborating
However I didn't add my original thoughts, even in those though I think I was lost
dusk edge
||I can work at it again to add more of your rhymes - maybe I didn't try hard en...
I LOVEEEEEE IT
fallen horizon
I LOVEEEEEE IT
but it took away a lot
dusk edge
Its fine
fallen horizon
ok so repost as Hollow Heart?
With Raised to Rose
and maybe some other corrections after another look thru
fallen horizon
good
fallen horizon
its greatttttttttttt
ty
dusk edge
and maybe some other corrections after another look thru
its perfect as it is... r8?
fallen horizon
actually no
The first line I want to change
coupled, needs to change into coupling
wdyt?
Coupled and coupling mean the same basically
But for some reason I think coupling sounds better
dusk edge
sureeee ur wish
dusk edge
In the poem?
fallen horizon
yes
The changes to make it seem like you've been erased from it are because of the acrostic
but ur not ok we did it together
dusk edge
I cud see "Hollow heart"
fallen horizon
yes
fallen horizon
Dude... ur talent is *awesomeeeeee*
I have had experience with collabs before I know what to do
However...
dusk edge
mhm?
fallen horizon
One I did with a talented person had more authenticity in it
I did like 20-30% of it while they did the majority
dusk edge
I did like 20 percent... ig... or lesser
and u did everything
and u made it perfecttttt
fallen horizon
Thank you too, it was nice; it was doing something different
Lol last time I worked on something like this was gosh years ago
boreal snowBOT