#senseless ponderings of nothingness

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crimson minnow
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Hours have passed
I can’t recall the requisite lore that came before
I eclipsed the moonshine in my eyes
Years recollected likewise to past lives
Cousins, fragile connections
Wasted potential for past life corrections

I’m sinking to the ocean floor
Shipwrecks, and brain rot
Blinded by the thought of an eternal compass
Ramblings of innermost fragmented reflection
Deflection of the ravine of iridescent watershed
Guided by an indigo light
Resting conscience dry in deep sleep
Unraveling the innermost layer of lies
Only to find a mirror of twisted tall tales

Drowning to the tune of the waning moon
Strolling the streets of vaguely familiar figures
Their form has evolved, bonds have dissolved
To the piles of pixie dust intertwined with decaying hope

Twisted tunnels of misunderstood minds, and uncured curses
Cousins, fragile connections
Wanderings of longing laced in regret

Deep-rooted guilt in a dying breed
My silence has spoiled the soulful seeds
Lilacs still linger, the bitter addiction of jealousy
Streaming through the senseless ramblings
Coursing through my every second of life
Over-thinking, better left as an afterthought
Shipwrecks, and brain rot

Wandering in an abandoned, and ingenious mindscape
A labyrinth, a lost mind, fell to time
Conceptualized, misconstrued in self-centric poetry
Annihilating the weight of social relation
Deafened by subconscious deprecation
Yet every nonsensical noise inspires his all-knowing notes

The only power he ever seems to hold in his helpless hands
A changeling, too other-worldly for his own psyche
Drawn to the night, a moth in the light
Spitting out senseless ponderings of nothings
Missing the faces his memory has painted away
Pages, rages growing from the failure to understand
The lectures of an invisible man

Finding horror in the vessel he hand-crafted
Natural decisions, and pre-disposed derisions

proven idol
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Yes!!! This was awesome to read! I love abstract metaphorical work and this was out of the park. I love stuff you can reread and reread and just try to interpret stuff.

light solstice
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This is great.

crimson minnow
crimson minnow
jaunty matrix
crimson minnow
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I wrote this poem very quickly

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Because idek at this point

jaunty matrix
crimson minnow
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Yes I had a unique process with this one

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I had the title in mind and just told myself to keep writing

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30 minutes later here we are

jaunty matrix
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I rlly need to work hard

crimson minnow
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Imagery-wise are amazing

jaunty matrix
jaunty matrix
crimson minnow
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I'm flattered

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Idk I think it's crazy, technically this month is 4 years of me writing poetry, but 1 year of me truly writing

jaunty matrix
warped gorge
crimson minnow
surreal anchor
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Okay I see you, this is epic, I’m on FaceTime right now and read it aloud so I got to really feel the way it fits in the mouth — something I think is very important for a poem — and it was quite nice. There are some really nice descriptions in here, and some quite nice metaphors. My friend who is on call really enjoyed it

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I’m not sure exactly what the through line is, though you do also call it senseless pondering (perhaps it may be more so ramblings) but I definitely enjoyed it

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You should be very proud < 3

hallow ore
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This.
This
Is
AMAZING!
man this was a roller coaster ride.... I love the feelings you have captured.... the storm of emotions you are trying to reign in and the simple deep emptiness you have portrayed in this..... this is beautiful, a masterpiece..... love your vocabulary too..... and the way u repeat lines to make it better, like a song......simply amazing..... I can almost hear the sigh of defeat with how vivid this is...... I’m gonna have fun trying to interpret this (explain it to me sometime later) ✨✨✨✨💙

crimson minnow
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Oh yeah and I realized it's been 2 years since I saw my cousin, and 5 since we've spoken

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So just idk general things that have been stuck on my mind recently

hallow ore
crimson minnow
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I wanted to delve into my deepest subconscious

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Also cause there's a lana del rey song where she's literally singing poetic nonsense that just comes to her but has meaning

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I wanted to write like that

hallow ore
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Nice

slate relicBOT
crimson minnow
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Recently I've been writing more fictional stuff

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But I wanted to see if I could still describe my psyche in meticulous specifics that only i could even grasp

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I actually shouldn't take all the credit for this poem though

bronze pilotBOT
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*I actually

shouldn't take all the credit

for this poem though*

- 66.88% nouhs8
crimson minnow
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I had a cowriter

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hallow ore
warped gorge
# crimson minnow Hours have passed I can’t recall the requisite lore that came before I eclipsed ...

idk what's its called but there is a term for describing smth that brings too much attention to one of it's own aspects that takes away attention from the work overall, like in creative writing you use too many rare and unique words that it's get more about writing then the story; here to me it comes across as the that but more with the inner rhyme and the abstract poetic meaning. It's a nice creative work, propely fleshed out; how i recmo recommend to change it would be like say it out loud and see if you can spot what i mean, that usually help

crimson minnow
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Like requisite

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Idek what requisite means

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This will probably sound like a cheap excuse for the poem but it was kinda supposed to be mental nonsense? Though I suppose there should be at least some cohesion

warped gorge
crimson minnow
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Any specific lines?

warped gorge
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you can spot the trend

crimson minnow
# crimson minnow Hours have passed I can’t recall the requisite lore that came before I eclipsed ...

DO NOT READ PAST THIS, this is the rest, tho tbh this poem is constantly evolving:

Nuanced, and numb
Dazed and dumb in the daylight
Wishing on shooting stars destroyed by the rising sun
Poisoned by one’s own voice
I always lacked, and lusted over precise control
Writings devoid of surface, and soul
Hollow emptiness, a custom-made abyss
A bitter bliss
My fingertips cease to have sight of happiness
My personality's out of touch with the aura and atmosphere
The uncanny headspace is curious, and queer

brittle lion
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Saving for later, I’ll read it in the morning or maybe just a bit later

crimson minnow
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K

brittle lion
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I love the metaphors you used (I think it’s called metaphors)
The way you described your mind as a labyrinth hard to escape your thoughts is amazing

static crypt
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I like I like, its giving Achilles Come Down

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very much a doom spiral

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agonizing over what you should have done and shouldn't have done. Over who you are and who you want to be

tall plank
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Beautifully written!!! 🎀

crimson minnow
crimson minnow
woven vessel
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Great read. Like Taylor Swift writing (I’m assuming your a Taylor Swift Stan with that profile picture) anyways really well written poem. Truly, Subhan 🥀

crimson minnow
woven vessel
crimson minnow
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It actually looked mostly black and white without editing somehow

bronze pilotBOT
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*It actually looked

mostly black and white without

editing somehow*

- 66.88% nouhs8
crimson minnow
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Lots of fog that day

woven vessel
crimson minnow
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Same words, different formatting

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crimson minnow
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New sequel poem, would love if anyone read it. It's kind of like this poem but more focused, and existential, and darker. It also mentions "senseless ponderings of nothingness" so that's neat, #1252139503666335794