#One sided love - Cockroach

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magic panther
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It’ll be alright is what they say
But I am still crying over you everyday
I’m looking at my phone
Hoping I won’t be alone
Waiting for your reply
But also knowing you won’t but I still deny

In my perfect world
I have you
We’d be kissing slowly in a dim lit room
I’d asked you if you love me
You’d say I do
In a perfect world you’d be mine

But the world isn’t perfect
Why did you ever leave my life?
I don’t know how I’m a ever going to get through Knowing that in this life I’ll never be with you

They say the bigger the love
The harder you fall
This love must have been big
Because I crashed through the floor
Nothings ever hurt this much before
Messaging you and you just ignore

I know we weren’t perfect
But can you tell me what I did to deserve this?
I am only half a man without you by my side
The other half only you can provide

I wish love is something I’d see
But I guess it’s something that might not be
Still waiting for your reply
But it never comes
Will I always be a lonely guy?

I type a message to say “goodbye”
But how do I say goodbye
to someone that never loved me?

worldly fiber
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I love you brother don’t feel so alone, here if you need anyone, I’m available most times.

worthy harness
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Great poem btw

magic panther
magic panther
neon remnant
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I feel like this poem would be greatly improved by being split up into stanzas and having a more consistent rhyme scheme.
A lesser suggestion I have is to give this poem a more uniform shape. "I don’t know how I’m a ever going to get through Knowing that in this life I’ll never be with you " is jarringly larger than every other line.

tame grail
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Woah

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I love the imaginary you have

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You used words with simple yet dynamic

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Totally 8/10

marble island
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Saving

old orchid
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Your emotional depth never disappoints me Roach, never. Truly the king of melancholic couplets.

magic panther
magic panther
tame grail
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Np

lavish parcel
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This would actually be a good annoying catchy song

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The rhyme scheme is pretty solid, so it lends itself towards that

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You have a breakup ballad on your hands

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I like "they say the bigger the love the harder you fall" and the subsequent lines

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Hope things get better for you 🫂

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But I can't be talking because I genuinely relate to this

magic panther
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@gilded yacht