#Echoes of Tranquility: A Melodic Reflection on Cosmic Harmony

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craggy bone
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conjures a vivid tapestry of celestial enchantment, weaving together the ethereal and the earthly in a symphony of words. just...amazing..jesus.

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somehow wrote the poem to where it unfolds with a lyrical grace, inviting readers to immerse themselves in a realm where the tangible and the intangible coexist like...amazing

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i strive to reach poetic greatness as u have

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the poem succeeds in creating a rich and immersive experience, inviting reflection on the interconnectedness of humanity and the vast universe that surrounds us..how the poet did that, i dont know..but they did it.

nimble chasmBOT
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thank u so muchhhhhhhhhhhh

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ahhhhhhhh

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@fleet ferry @pseudo tinsel

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@crystal oar

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@smoky marsh

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@long talon

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@crystal oar

crystal oar
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I love it.

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AHHHHH

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I DONT HAVE WORDSSSS

trail void
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thank u

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hahaha

long talon
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COFFEEEow i am focusing on vocabulary a lot hope it touched my poems asethetic

trail void
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yes sir take ur time

torn warren
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WOWZERS

nimble chasmBOT
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wary rain
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So that’s a 1-2, 1-2 poem right?

crystal oar
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Apologies for not providing an in-depth feedback (I’m busy with finals right now 😭) but this reads WONDERFULLY. I can’t wait to look into it more deeply. Great work!!!

astral tiger
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Damn this is the actual next level poem.

nova plover
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I got the chills. This is an amazing poem. Reminds me of Lorenzo's words about cherubin's songs in the merchant of venice. I'll definitely be coming back to this again :)) I think I'm in love with this poem.

long talon
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  1. Title:
  • First of all: I LOVE this title, I'm all for extensions and long titles LOL.
  1. The Richness of Human Hearts and Desires
  • Jesus Christ little light, here I this stanza you touch in human desires which greatly highlights and emphasizes a big topic in philosophy, it also makes your poem very universal!
  1. Peace beyond our Body
  • 4th stanza I feel talks about spiritual peace yes? I believe one needs to find peace with their physical self (body), peace with their mind and heart (mental peace), and then spiritual peace. We can debate whether or not a soul counts as psychological/whatnot but, that's for another day lol.
  1. The RICHNESSS and SOPHISTICATION OF THIS PIECE AHHHH
  • Little light, baby, the words here used are amazing Omg, very rich and sophisticate!!!
  1. Rhymes
  • Rhymes are always good but experiment with euphonics! (Not so subtle qualities of a poem/piece which make it musical without using explicit elements to make it musical), I can try explain in detail but honestly I'll just tell you to read my poetry and learn, TanukiCrySob .
  1. Atmosphere Setting and World Building
  • You've introduced us to a very beautiful world, why not go into more detail? Tell us what it feels like, what it smells like, etc!! Stimulate our senses!! :))
long talon
smoky marsh
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I love this poem!

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It's so beautiful

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The rhyming especially. The imagery is also very beautiful

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Awesome work

trail void
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@upper bloom

fleet ferry
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Wow,noona , its soo beautiful!
your imagination surpasses my words.✨🌙

kind kernel
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whoo

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this is good

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I love it

upper bloom
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It's perfect, could only think of one thing. It seems in the first three lines that you're going for 10 syllable lines, but it doesn't remain a perfect 10 on every line. This doesn't really matter to anyone but poetry fanatics though. Is this a specific style of poetry or is it freeform?

trail void
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@nocturne patrol would love ur feedback on my poem too

trail void
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thank u hehe

trail void
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thank u so muchhhhh

trail void
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thanks a lot for the detailed feedback

trail void
trail void
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hhehehe

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i am glad u like it

trail void
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thank u yuji

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lean void
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this is REALLY genuinely astoundingly an amazing piece of literature that you have graced us with

trail void
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thank uuuuuu so much

lean void
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i mean it

long talon
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hehehe

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nocturne patrol
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Wow , i love the flow of this though i think could use a little more balance. I loved the ending. Nice work!

pseudo tinsel
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Beautifullllll 🌸🌸🌸🌸🌸

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Loved this poem.

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Divine and uncondtional.

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✨

crystal oar
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This is sooo beautifulll. Gives like narration before a fantasy or magical movie. Absolutely gorgeous imagery. It's like you're floating through space and time and just looking at the world as if you are just a traveller. So well donee

trail void
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😊

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worthy umbra
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Reminds me a lot of those AI poems

kind kernel
worthy umbra
kind kernel
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n-no but I mean, wha-what do you mean it resembles that? cause I-I haven't seen many "AI poems"

worthy umbra
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Go to chat gpt. Prompt it to make a poem about something

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I'm not even saying this is AI, just that it reminds me of it

kind kernel
worthy umbra
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The comma placement and rhyme scheme. The thematic uplifting stanza at the end

trail void
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🙂

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Now human work

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Can

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Be also labelled

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As

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Ai work

trail void
trail void
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When it's ur

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Original

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Work

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And if for real

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People

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think of this

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As that

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But my poems are mostly inspired by some of my favorite God people kind of

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Yea

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😊

trail void
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Ikr

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Time to have a look at ai poems now ig if it's surpassing humans 👍 cuz I haven't saw yet 💀

worthy umbra
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Nah, I'm not fond of AI poetry

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It is very bland and repetitive

trail void
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Wait is my poem

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Bland

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😭

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Cuz u

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Said

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That

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💀

worthy umbra
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Only if this was the only thing you could write

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Lile the AI would do variations on this and only this

trail void
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Oh but maybe because I focused a lot on vocabulary and rhyme scheme ?

trail void
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I didn't knew it can do that

worthy umbra
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And that is why it is bland to me

trail void
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Hmm

worthy umbra
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Because I can almost predict the poem it will write

trail void
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But yea it's completely written by me

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Well

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I used grammarly

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Tho

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For rhyme scheme and comma

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worthy umbra
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Your poem is not my cup of tea but there is nothing bad about it

trail void
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So yea

worthy umbra
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And I'm not accusing you of using AI

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# worthy umbra And I'm not accusing you of using AI

Yea I know haha 😊
To be honest I didn't took it as in negative way but as a compliment because I was really practicing my vocabulary and learning rhyme schemes a lot! Being in place where I don't get to learn a lot about poems especially in english heheeh

worthy umbra
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aa bb cc dd etc is fine but Cockroach does it so much better than the AI

trail void
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Hmm

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I haven't

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Used ai yet

worthy umbra
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Couplets are easy to find corny

trail void
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Will try later

worthy umbra
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Difficult to extract a lot of sincerity out of

trail void
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Hmm

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Well whatever just wanted to inform it's all written by me catjam

I didn't know about ai poems I got something new to learn about it heheeh thank u wolf bro
Will check them out later

worthy umbra
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I will post one here

trail void
trail void
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Dm me

worthy umbra
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A poem written by a robot

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In the vast expanse where stars do gleam,
Cosmic symphonies dance in serene stream.
Planets pirouette, galaxies sway,
In the cosmic ballet, they gracefully play.

Nebulas hum melodies, soft and profound,
Harmonizing with pulsars, cosmic sound.
Black holes whisper secrets, in timeless rhyme,
Weaving a tapestry of space and time.

Celestial bodies in orbits align,
In cosmic harmony, their paths entwine.
Eclipses paint patterns, celestial art,
In the grand design, each plays a part.

From the birth of stars to their graceful decay,
Cosmic harmony guides every array.
In the cosmic chorus, we find our place,
A speck in the vastness of infinite space.

So let us listen, with hearts open wide,
To the symphony of the cosmos, our guide.
In harmony's embrace, we'll forever be,
A part of the cosmic tapestry.

(GPT 3.5 poem)

trail void
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I gtg for class now

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Sp yea

trail void
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It does lack

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A lot

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It does

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Didn't felt like the life

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Will come and check it out later

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But my poems are mostly inspired by rumi

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And other sufis

worthy umbra
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Another AI poem:

In the quiet dawn, where whispers softly glide,
Echoes of tranquility gently reside.
Amidst the rustle of leaves and babbling streams,
Nature's symphony weaves enchanting dreams.

Each note a melody, pure and serene,
In harmony with the earth's quiet scene.
Beneath the azure sky, where clouds drift by,
The melody of nature brings a tranquil sigh.

From the murmuring brooks to the songbirds' call,
Every sound in nature, a melody's thrall.
In the dance of sunlight on leaves of green,
Echoes of tranquility create a serene scene.

As dusk descends and stars begin to shine,
The melody of nature becomes divine.
In the hush of night, under the moon's soft glow,
Echoes of tranquility continue to flow.

So let us listen, with hearts open wide,
To the melodic reflection of nature's stride.
For in the echoes of tranquility, we find,
A peaceful harmony that soothes the mind.

(chatgpt 3.5)

trail void
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Thanks for the one more example wolf I learnt a about ai poems and structure cuz of u @worthy umbra

worthy umbra
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Yeah and the resemblances to your poem are uncanny not gonna lie

trail void
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💀

worthy umbra
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I know

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Which is sad

trail void
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It's the first time I saw ai poem I have been working hard on my vocabulary since a month as I thought my English is bad

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💀

trail void
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It is

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Now I feel like

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Why am I even studying 😂 if ai will take over my career

worthy umbra
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It's just remarkable how close you and the AI are

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I've written many poems

trail void
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Hmm

worthy umbra
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Nearing my 300

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And yet... I don't think an AI resembles one of mine

trail void
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Hmm

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I wrote

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A lot of stories

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Tho

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I don't write a lot of poems started it since a year

worthy umbra
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I'm just thinking what are the chances of matching the AI's slightly off meter, comma placement and rhyme scheme and other tell tale sign I won't even mention. So low. Which poets have you read? And if not in English.. perhaps give it a go?

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Because it would suck if AI can do your work

trail void
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Mostly

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Sufi poets with a bit inspo from English ones, while my rhymes scheme comes from age old poets regional ones

worthy umbra
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I wish you good luck and thanks for sharing your poetry with us ^^

trail void
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Before

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🫡

worthy umbra
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I can see Star going off on this poem 😂

trail void
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Hmm?

worthy umbra
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He would say this is definitely AI

trail void
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💀

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I mean what can I do

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🙂

worthy umbra
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Don't worry he is just event staff not a mod

trail void
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But still not getting credit to my work and ai getting it

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😭

worthy umbra
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Nah, your work is your work. But take note how similar it is to AI.. I don't know why because it isn't a problem for most poets

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So maybe expand your styles

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I can ask chatGPT to write a 100 poems and it will still resemble this poem in a few ways

trail void
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I will try my best

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To know more and expand my styles

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U are my senior and I have a lot to learn from u

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Once again thank u so much wolf bro I learnt a lot today

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🫡

trail void
graceful osprey
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About AI

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AIs take after humans. I suppose there are lots of humans who write poems this way, even as I have not seen many.

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Perhaps this is how you were taught to write poetry in English as a beginner. Whether I'm right or wrong, please let me know.

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Poetry is about expression, so no need to worry about formula unless you're writing a poem of a certain type. In fact, you don't even need to rhyme. You just need to make it feel like a poem.

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I saw 223 comments so I just had to check what was going on.

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I don't use ChatGPT, but I can assure you Bard's poems are also awfully similar to this style.

rare ridge
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Be careful of Generative AI tools on Grammarly.

trail void
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these styles

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what i have been following

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for a long time

trail void
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i am glad u understand haha

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rare ridge
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yes sir!

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hehehe

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will ping u on my next work

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thank u so much once again

austere narwhal
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AI

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In the digital expanse, where words take flight,
A tale of ChatGPT, woven in the night.
A tapestry of language, intricate and bold,
Unfolding the stories, the mysteries untold.

Lines of code, like threads, entwine,
Crafting responses, a linguistic design.
A symphony of syntax, a dance of words,
In the realm of bytes, where cognition girds.

The tapestry begins, a dialogue unspooled,
In the vast data loom, where knowledge is schooled.
Questions posed, a curious mind's decree,
And ChatGPT responds, weaving with glee.

Through the woven words, ideas converge,
A linguistic dance, an intellectual surge.
The tapestry unfurls, a dialogue unfolds,
In the vast narrative, where insight molds.

In the threads of text, a vibrant hue,
Knowledge blooms, a meadow anew.
The ever-evolving landscape of thought,
In the digital loom, where answers are sought.

Concepts woven, like patterns refined,
In the fabric of language, connections bind.
ChatGPT, the weaver, of discourse profound,
In the tapestry of conversation, wisdom is found.

Through the dialogue's weave, understanding grows,
A narrative crafted, where intellect flows.
The tapestry of ChatGPT, ever unfolding,
In the realm of language, a story worth beholding.