Infront of
a pond.
Lower myself
and stare
stare
keep staring,
at the
Silent waves-
keep staring,
you
I, lost
tragedy of
Self.
#Selfless
gloomy tundra
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wicked pebble
OHHHH THIS LINEATION IS SICK I LOVE IT it’s simple but effective. i would though change up the punctuation a bit i would do a period at keep staring parts the consecutive commas are a bit confusing (that’s just me though)
gloomy tundra
OHHHH THIS LINEATION IS SICK I LOVE IT it’s simple but effective. i would though...
Ty for the feedback, im going to make revised versions of some of my recent poems and i'll take care of the punctuations 🙂
bright hemlockBOT
Ty for the feedback, im going to make revised versions of some of my recent poem...
Wonderful! @gloomy tundra has just pregressed to level 12!
wicked pebble
no problem!! i really like your writing style.