Revenge

[vocal jackal]

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[vocal jackal]

This the revised version of revenge!

[polar fjord]

Written from the heart, influential stuff

Only two issues. The proper way to spell vein is with an e, vain is someone who likes the way they look. Second is more of a suggestion, you say "karma does bite back and find its way back to you", some people don't like when a word repeats in the same sentence, so you could replace it with "karma does hold debts" or something, I'm not sure, that's where your creativity comes in.

[vocal jackal]

Yes ty I didn't even notice that it said vains because sometimes my phone just auto corrects me and yes I'm definitely gonna edit it right now !

[polar fjord]

Like I said, this is raw emotion, time old fuel for poems

And all art tbh

Makes great stuff, but in the heat of the moment you make tiny mistakes, happens to everyone

[vocal jackal]

Yup I have alot of like 1 they 4th person poetry idk why but I shocked myself with them

[vocal jackal]

Exactly !

[polar fjord]

I love when that happens, did that recently with a bit of a sonnet, a really long poem from like Shakespeare times

[vocal jackal]

Exactly!!! I'm definitely gonna show u one of my top 5 poems

[polar fjord]

I think we can post poems in #📜・poetry-discussion

[vocal jackal]

Oh yeahhh

Okay I'll send it there and I'll close my post

[polar fjord]

If you're proud of it you can post it for peeps to see