knotty fox
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Heart Break
i hear them, distorted echoes in a distance
and all my feelings, shattered in patience
as inner rhythm of love turns into drops
of tears caused by delusion as all time stops
with it exposing my numbness to the dark
including my cold heart, which is now torn apart
frozen and abandoned, left under pure snow
my mind fractured as i finally come to know
each piece with its own memories that glow
as I observe to accept the fragments of the flow
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mint raptor
Powerful words ".... shattered in patience as inner rhythm of love turns into drops of tears....".
It's quite sad but comforting in it's own sense.
I feel it could be structured better, but I also feel there's a reason that you've wrote it that way -" Trying to convey the feelings in a restless manner". Maybe I'm wrong.
And I'm quite intrigued by the undersign - emoji of a mirror 🪞.
Is it something significant that I couldn't understand or didn't notice?
Would love to know.
knotty fox
Powerful words ".... shattered in patience as inner rhythm of love turns into dr...
when i write such things im in a more reflective state, i reflect upon the past memories and actions as i express these feelings, the mirror also signifies that the words written could be an external reflection of how the reader would feel when they are going through a similar experience, making them feel less lonely.
Also thank you for your feedback. I know this could be structured better, but I wrote this a long time ago and felt it was better to post it this way without changing it, but yes you got it right, it is feelings conveyed in a restless manner.
mint raptor
Thank you for taking time and helping me understand it better.
Loved the explanation for mirrors, I too thought it would be something like that.
Going to check out your other works as well. ❤️