#The Minefields

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open dome
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love it , especially the first line coolshakespeare

green ore
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tysm

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cunning sorrel
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what exactly do you need help with

green ore
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Like does it flow ok, are there any parts that seem out of place in the poem or sound wrong

cunning sorrel
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dude

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oh apparently we cant say the f word lmfao

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i said this poem is effing beautiful

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seriously

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it flows well

green ore
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really

cunning sorrel
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the only thing i could say would to change "I am illogical," to "I am illogical." and start a new sentence with "And"

cunning sorrel
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i love the topic and them

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theme

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and what you take with it

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its very profound

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and i never thought about life it was never ending like that

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seems horrible

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but maybe good too/

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i like the ending too

green ore
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thank you so so much

cunning sorrel
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np

green ore
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😍

safe otter
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Amazing poem! I loved the first line a whole lot!