lost on the journey

[peak flint]

I'm lost still
In Myself im trying to find
Somewhere locked in my mind

I'm on the trail
But it's still looking long
Myself stoping my journey

I don't know where I'm heading
I'm on a path but unsure if it's true
Or a farce created in my mind

Am I an imposter
Is this real at all
Or am I talking to a wall

My voice lost in space
A scream no one hears
Or did I throw myself there

Hope is fleeting
As my soul fades
Locked with a key I threw away?

I need to guide
Tell me I'm alive
Stop my from drowning ...
In my own pride

This is the song sing
To no one but myself
So how to I think I will get help

I'm lost on a journey
I don't know if I can find my way
My own design my own maze

[shy sentinel]

Great one! Just add some more deepness and do some editing on words to make its more creative. I appreciate it! Keep growing ❤

[ivory imp]

it's nice but there are a some grammar errors. However I like the theme of feeling lost and I feel like you could go a little deeper in it. The metaphors are good too! Especially 'My voice lost in space / A scream no one hears / Or did I throw myself in there'
Keep it up!

[narrow atlas]

L

[peak flint]

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[peak flint]

Thank you I know some of it isn't correct Grammer wise but I feel it adds to my work because I make these when I'm in a bad place so it shows where I'm at in life with words but also how it's typed I guess idk

[coral citrus]

It's a good poem already but maybe if you add more question marks, it will make it feel more powerful and evocative

[ivory imp]

Oh I see since it was an artistic choice ^_^ I didn't really notice at first

[peak flint]

It's ok hard to notice when it just looks like mistakes 😂

[peak flint]

Thanks

[coral citrus]

😃

[odd plume]

I really enjoyed this. Nice write.

[peak flint]

Thank you