The Other Side Of the Moon (revised version) | The Art of Poetry | Page 1

south epoch Jan 20, 2024, 3:07 AM

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criticism is welcome, the poem's too long so I had to make a new post cat_tea

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The Other Side Of the Moon (revised version)

eager hearth Jan 20, 2024, 3:31 AM

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Lovely piece of work this is

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@south epoch

south epoch Jan 20, 2024, 3:37 AM

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eager hearth <@1088627708772221008>

thank you

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Is there anything you would recommend improving?

eager hearth Jan 20, 2024, 3:42 AM

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south epoch Is there anything you would recommend improving?

To continue to shine on" them and their loved ones"drags a bit it would be great if u had a better word for it as loved ones is related other than that nothing I can tell

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Themselves and their beloved for eg

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But that's jus my opinion

#The Other Side Of the Moon (revised version)