Treasure Your Creativity | The Art of Poetry | Page 1

eager brook Jan 17, 2024, 9:44 AM

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As I stand here dreary and weary
In a predicament that's extremely scary
In this dungeon that is my soul
I battle for control

A blast,a shot,a splatter of blood
I shiver and shudder in this Blizzard
making my way forward
And lo, behold,I discover,
a body in rigor
that is my own

Here I rest
A knife in my chest
The creativity I once possessed
Slaughtered and murdered
By an inbred
That was myself

Love your job
And drink and sob
But..treasure and prevent the vanquish of your imagination
Cause that would be definite and complete tarnation

eager brook Jan 17, 2024, 12:16 PM

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mild vigil Jan 17, 2024, 1:51 PM

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a big fan of star wars i see

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COFFEEEow

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are all your works star wars related?

eager brook Jan 17, 2024, 1:52 PM

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Ye

eager brook Jan 17, 2024, 1:53 PM

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mild vigil are all your works star wars related?

No not always it's usually about hope

mild vigil Jan 17, 2024, 1:53 PM

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a new hope

mild vigil Jan 17, 2024, 1:53 PM

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eager brook As I stand here dreary and weary In a predicament that's extremely scary In this...

Hmmm this is a good one. The structure in the first 3 stanzas is very consistent and it reads smoothly. I like choice of words a lot “A blast, a shot, as splatter of blood/ I shiver and shudder in this Blizzard”. This is completely my own opinion but I feel like the last two lines snap the flow a little. Again, if you like it better that way, please keep it. It’s good work 🩵

eager brook Jan 17, 2024, 1:54 PM

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mild vigil Hmmm this is a good one. The structure in the first 3 stanzas is very consistent...

Thank you for the feedback and yes I also feel that the blizzard line doesn't work as well now as when I originally read it

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After writing

mild vigil Jan 17, 2024, 1:54 PM

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either way it's a fun little addition to direction in writing

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I haven't seen Fandom related work

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nerds indeed welcome too

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after all, we're poets

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peachcatspinning

eager brook Jan 17, 2024, 1:55 PM

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Yah

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Thanks again for your time

eager brook Jan 17, 2024, 1:56 PM

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mild vigil after all, we're poets

Real

mild vigil Jan 17, 2024, 1:56 PM

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no, thank you. I'm glad you get to share thoughts that originate in yourself

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that's what's so nice about writing. it's expression of the individual

eager brook Jan 17, 2024, 1:57 PM

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mild vigil that's what's so nice about writing. it's expression of the individual

True I am actually quite inspired by Robert Frost

mild vigil Jan 17, 2024, 1:57 PM

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for if you didn't have yourself

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well what would there be

eager brook Jan 17, 2024, 1:58 PM

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True

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@mild vigil could you also check out https://discord.com/channels/944439929734312006/1197176575460909127 if u have time?

mild vigil Jan 17, 2024, 2:04 PM

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beyond this, there is a personal labor and the desire to share expression as one of the basis of self. perhaps the acknowledgement of perception and what can stem from it. seeing the world and what can be returned to it

eager brook Jan 17, 2024, 2:05 PM

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mild vigil beyond this, there is a personal labor and the desire to share expression as one...

Yah the real issue is people lose their creativity under the weight of the bureaucratic system

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We have lost many great minds this way

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Daily struggle steals your wonder and inspiration

mild vigil Jan 17, 2024, 2:07 PM

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also, I tend to view work as a whole and the message it's trying to convey. I'm not too experienced in the intricate parts such as grammar and structure, so apologies if you were looking for help there. I suppose just giving my own methodical, literal and emotional interpretation

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