#"Selenophile Reverie "

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heady heath
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This would be cool with bongos.

sage fable
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I like the emojis in the piece! 😃

And the poem and it’s meaning are both very beautiful!

small crystal
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its hard to take this poem seriously with all the emojis lol, but the ending is perfectly wrapped, it might need a little structure tho
still the poem is really beautiful

leaden saffron
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@small crystal Thank you for your feedback on the poetry. I'm grateful for your input, and I'm committed to improving my craft. Your suggestions will be instrumental in refining future pieces.😃💫

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sage fable
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No problem!

leaden saffron
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@heady heath Thank you for your precious feedback 💫✨😄🌙

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drowsy star
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Nice one

leaden saffron
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@drowsy star thank you for your precious feedback broo ✨

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drowsy star
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Np

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leaden saffron
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@sharp scaffold

sharp scaffold
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Is nice. I don't think cheesy poems are bad. In my opinion need a bit more polishing. I liked your idea of using the emojis is interesting. Overall is a sweet piece i liked it, i would give it a 7.1/10. Keep it up

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@granite sentinel

granite sentinel
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Okay, this is nice! I just would like to say that I am not really big fan of emojis in my poems, but thats just my opinion. Its because I don't understand if it means a feeling, word or pause when I read it.

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Your language you use its pretty nice, However I feel you repeat word "moon" Too much. I tried to find some sense in that repetetion, but I couldn't. But nice poem after all. Keep going

leaden saffron
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@granite sentinel
Yeaa, Ik putting emojis in poems can feel a bit unusual 😅 actually i included so many emojis because I wanted it to look a bit magical..... but ig it made this look like weirdd....also thank you broo for your precious feedback..... next tym I'll definitely keep these points in mind . 🌙✨👍

leaden saffron
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@earnest inlet

earnest inlet
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I really like how you use personification on celestial bodies

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This again reminds me of another poem I wrote, called moonlight minds, but I didn't post that one yet

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Genuinely curious, what was your inspiration for the title?

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Also favorite line in this one has got to be "in moonlight nights, vaniahed like a tide"

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Your imagery is just so good