Beautiful
#The Other Side Of the Moon
runic trail
Amazing work with the imager
thank youuu. Is there anywhere you think I can improve?
round iris
Your enjambment could be better
runic trail
enjambment?
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Stanza 2 specifically
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enjambment?
How you order your lines fir a visual or rhythm effect
Example
The rain falls
Drip drop
Drip
Drop drop
runic trail
Ooh
round iris
The line spacing gives it a feel
runic trail
I'll tinker around with it
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Stanza 7 has it perfectly though
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I'll tinker around with it
Sure
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And your stanza on Adults has potential to be much better. If you add more symbolism and figurative language
runic trail
And your stanza on Adults has potential to be much better. If you add more symbo...
I'll take that to mind
So tinker around with 1-6 and fix things and elaborate?