Her in the dark | The Art of Poetry | Page 1

viscid pelican Jan 13, 2024, 10:45 PM

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Nice one

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Could be more expressive

vagrant anchor Jan 13, 2024, 10:46 PM

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viscid pelican Nice one

thank youu

vagrant anchor Jan 13, 2024, 10:46 PM

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viscid pelican Could be more expressive

How so?

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Could you give reccomendations?

viscid pelican Jan 13, 2024, 10:46 PM

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"she will continue to indulge in the ocean of love for you like an addict"

vagrant anchor Jan 13, 2024, 10:47 PM

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heart that sounds so much better-

viscid pelican Jan 13, 2024, 10:47 PM

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Hmm

vagrant anchor Jan 13, 2024, 10:50 PM

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I'm not used to writing emotions(*꒦ິ꒳꒦ີ), as I don't often express my emotion that much, but thank you so much for reccomendations-

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I still have much to improve

viscid pelican Jan 13, 2024, 10:52 PM

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"often thoughts of him invade her head recklessly,coming and never leaving .

viscid pelican Jan 13, 2024, 10:52 PM

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vagrant anchor I still have much to improve

Take your time,its a good poem

vagrant anchor Jan 13, 2024, 10:53 PM

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thank youu

viscid pelican Jan 13, 2024, 10:53 PM

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"she wish you could hear the silent chorus of love she was singing to you from the shadows , so both you and her would dance to itm

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It*

viscid pelican Jan 13, 2024, 10:55 PM

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vagrant anchor thank youu

#1194060783928217701 #1194035618477510757 #1195408509701988524

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I tried some love poems as well

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Dont know if they work

vagrant anchor Jan 13, 2024, 10:56 PM

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Ooo

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I'll look at them

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And maybe offer reccomendations?

viscid pelican Jan 13, 2024, 10:58 PM

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Try to associate the words you use with abstract words

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Like love= burning passion

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Run away from= escape the feeling of

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Or things like that

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I hope u get it

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Idk how to explain

vagrant anchor Jan 13, 2024, 11:04 PM

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I get it dw-

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complicity?

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More emotion

viscid pelican Jan 13, 2024, 11:05 PM

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Tbh the ideas you showed here are good

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They are not simple

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Which is good

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You could maybe make a paradox

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But u have to find conparisons

vagrant anchor Jan 13, 2024, 11:07 PM

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paradox?

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How would you suggest that?

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As in something untrue be true? or something similar correct?

viscid pelican Jan 13, 2024, 11:09 PM

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Yes

vagrant anchor Jan 13, 2024, 11:09 PM

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Ooooh

viscid pelican Jan 13, 2024, 11:09 PM

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Check #1194954884550766592

vagrant anchor Jan 13, 2024, 11:10 PM

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I play around with my poem and see what I could do

viscid pelican Jan 13, 2024, 11:10 PM

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Sure thing

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#1195693644552876063

vagrant anchor Jan 13, 2024, 11:10 PM

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Give me a few moments to collect my braincells

viscid pelican Jan 13, 2024, 11:10 PM

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No worries

vagrant anchor Jan 13, 2024, 11:11 PM

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Your poems are gooddd

viscid pelican Jan 13, 2024, 11:11 PM

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Ty bro

vagrant anchor Jan 13, 2024, 11:11 PM

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They remind me of some poems I wrote, but it's very unique and expresses very well

viscid pelican Jan 13, 2024, 11:12 PM

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My best love poem is #1195128008596529244 and philosophical #1194954884550766592 thats how i'd rank them

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I would reccomend u try some philosophical ones as well

vagrant anchor Jan 13, 2024, 11:12 PM

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wowww

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I have a few of my best ones that I might put out later today

obsidian nacelleBOT Jan 13, 2024, 11:13 PM

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*I have a few of

my best ones that I might put

out later today*

viscid pelican Jan 13, 2024, 11:13 PM

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#1195767964083953776 Is full of metaphors if u wanna check

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So u can make an idea

viscid pelican Jan 13, 2024, 11:13 PM

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vagrant anchor I have a few of my best ones that I might put out later today

I'd love to read them

vagrant anchor Jan 13, 2024, 11:14 PM

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viscid pelican I'd love to read them

Then I'll ping you by then exhaustedhappy

viscid pelican Jan 13, 2024, 11:14 PM

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COFFEEEow

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Sure thing

#Her in the dark