Dying light

[uneven minnow]

Wonderful! @torpid mist has just pregressed to level 4!

[torpid mist]

Well uh- I honestly don't even know what to say ima leave all to comment on this I personally think this is one of my best-

[torpid mist]

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[sand trail]

you could try to use metaphors

like you can try to find fancy words that can be associated with the things uw ant to express

[torpid mist]

I agree I know I'm gonna go back and edit it anyway since I'm sleep deprived now

[sand trail]

for example : i`m cold(as in distant) > my heart is so frozen that not even the burning flame of prometeus can melt it

[torpid mist]

Very raw. stanza 4, line 3 is my favourite

[torpid mist]

Damn

[sand trail]

wassup bro

[torpid mist]

Ouuu yeah that's fire

[torpid mist]

Thanks!

[torpid mist]

Ya know what ima do this for the 2nd part of this poem

[sand trail]

?

[torpid mist]

I'm gonna make it 2 parts so I'm gonna add the metaphors and the fancy words

[sand trail]

ok

[sand trail]

Did u finish

[torpid mist]

Nah I didn't even start

[uneven minnow]

Wonderful! @torpid mist has just pregressed to level 5!