It's more difficult to give advice on poems that are this short because even commenting on one sentence is commenting on like 33% of the poem, know what I mean? haha. Either way what I'd like to comment on is that using phrases like ''Actions speak louder than words'' that are already in wide use is weaker poetic language than using something that comes down to something similar that you poetically came up with for the poem. It could really elevate a work to avoid using common phrases like that. Readers tend to read over those phrases more quickly because they're everywhere as well.
#Please remove
turbid vine
pulsar phoenix
This seems to be more of iykyk kind of poem because I don’t think many people might truly understand
cobalt nova
It's more difficult to give advice on poems that are this short because even com...
Agreed thanks!
cobalt nova
This seems to be more of iykyk kind of poem because I don’t think many people mi...
With most of my poems it’s a what they mean to a person typa thing so yeah I understand
sick kiln
Tbh i didn't get it , if u trust someone, concerns are actually increased . Although the part about doubt does make sense , coz trusting someone doesn't mean all doubts fade away.
cobalt nova
Tbh i didn't get it , if u trust someone, concerns are actually increased . A...
Yeah agreed that’s kinda why I don’t write poems this short because the longer ones make better sense😭
cobalt nova
Please remove
pulsar phoenix
Poetry there is no right or wrong way to interpret one’s writing. Beauty is in the eye of the beholder.