Food For Thought

[orchid frost]

Beautiful ✨

[celest elm]

I think it’d be interesting to start the poem differently:

Plath said that life is like a fig tree,
Each plump fruit a different diversion from the trunk of my living.
Thus, for as long as I can remember,
I’ve looked up at the ways the branches reach out in all directions.

[limpid wharf]

*I think it’d be

interesting to start the

poem differently:*

- Artie (AHH)

[raw iron]

👍 alright thank u

[celest elm]

Not That particularly, cause that was written quite fast and with little thought

But i hope you get what im trying to say

[raw iron]

wow thank u, this is really helpful !!

[slim zephyr]

Wonderful! @raw iron has just pregressed to level 3!

[raw iron]

no worries i know what u mean

[gray vale]

the wordiness takes away from this poem. imo the best poems make you feel the most with little words. don't over explain lines keep them short and sweet.

overall nice work!

so instead of
"so maybe that's why i pour myself
the elixir and intoxicate myself"
try
"perhaps that is why i pour,
my elixir now full
my mind, intoxicated"

[raw iron]

yeahh i totally agree!!

[raw iron]

alright ill keep that in mind! thank you so much 🙏

[gray vale]

anytime!

[slim haven]

Nice poem

[winter smelt]

From one wordy writer to another. There is a beauty in wordiness too. I also appreciate academia, so probably that’s why we do what we do in our poetry lol. Your poem is great nonetheless! I’d say make some poems wordy, and make others focus on sparseness with words, but saturated with feeling