poem or a song?

[obtuse geyser]

This reads melodically in my head. Definitely a nice rhythm/flow. There’s a nice subtle rhyme too. It works either way to me. A melody could work, and it could be more of spoken word too. Depends on what you feel works the best. I like it as is!!

[lost jetty]

decided you hated it?

[solemn pine]

i was lowkey not about it im workshopping it again LOLLLLL too back n forth