Ask Not? (By HermanDev)

[vestal rose]

having power twice

within the same stanza, much less after each line is a bit much and repetive, for greater impact maybe choose another word

also is this all of ur poem?

[flint linden]

I like it, but it seems highly stereotypical in nature — I’m just unsure of the fact that it works in micro poem format (especially since its already based on a short quote “with great power comes great responsibility”, so it feel much less like a poem and much more like a quote)

[vestal rose]

in terms of how i feel

[flint linden]

I also just don’t really get what you’re trying to convey?? That we shouldn’t ask questions unless we’re responsible? That’s just a sort of weird moral to have in a poem — if that I’m interpreting it correctly, that is

[keen prawn]

Yeah whole poem.

[vestal rose]

i defintely feel reaffirmed with the power of knowledge

[keen prawn]

Uh no, guess I have to work on that

[vestal rose]

however if you want to create stronger emotions within ur reader

maybe choose different word choices

but otherwise its good

[keen prawn]

Not going for emotion here, just humor and insight

Usually I strengthen pieces w emotions but I kinda liked this as it was and it was 5am tbf

[keen prawn]

The repetition is supposed to be to humorous effect / for max clarity. I may do a rework of this to be in a different style

I think the humor tone doesn’t get conveyed, will try to fix

I have ideas for how to fix it now, ty.

[flat charm]

https://tenor.com/view/spider-man-uncle-ben-with-great-power-comes-great-responsibility-its-true-just-saying-gif-24193883