#Teach Me Where God Resides In These Woods (AHH)

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echo orbit
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This was very fun to read. A lovely philosophy penned very beautifully! With some bitting wit for emphasis. The space feels lived in and yet idealized and picturesque. Stellar work!

wise bay
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THIS WAS FANTASTIC!!! Your evolving style and my goodness... the content and devices here POP - wow. I just woke up and I'm floored!

wise bay
mental yacht
wise bay
heady torrent
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I think this poem is beautiful!
It explores the beauty in small moments, from the sparrows and dragonflies to the moonlit reflections and childhood memories. I also like how it talks about the coexistence of light and darkness...

wise bay
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@wise bay
A reminder for myself, if I don't remember feel free to @ me

polar glen
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:D

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i really enjoy it

mental yacht
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I LOVE YOU

wise bay
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Absolutely loved this! The only thing I have to say about it is that the O!'s seemed really abrupt. (And I misread it as Oi, but that's just me not being able to read) I'm not sure if you were trying to make them abrupt or not, if you weren't I would suggest maybe doing Oh, instead. Ofc I don't expect you to change this.
I do love, love, love this poem! It's super good

mental yacht
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@jovial cairn sorry I fell asleep, just ping me in your poem

jovial cairn
jovial cairn
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For starters the flow and rhythm is amazing. The slant rhymes and perfect rhymes are subtle and makes this very fun to read. There’s also great amount of specific imagery and sensory details: north of cemetery, rhododendron, rhubarb…daffodils; it really captures and transports you somewhere else yet familiar as well. Also it’s pretty funny lol like (construction… proud sons), it’s got very pointed and even sarcastic humor which really fits the theme. Another also: that ending is just so good lol

wise bay
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I feel like I’m in some uni course reading this

mental yacht
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… is that a good thing … 🤨

wise bay
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Yea

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For u yes

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For me no my head hurts I need a peace of paper to unwind this poem on

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It’s well executed

mental yacht
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Thank you 😭🙏

regal terrace
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What a lovely piece! I enjoyed reading it

safe sapphire
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hmmmmmmmmmmmm i feel like i need to meditate on this one more, which is good cause its making me think, but this gives me different vibes, i think i like it. the title also is very carrie approved, good vibe

mental yacht
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I’m glad the title is approved 🙏

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Originally that title was the first line actually

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The og title was Iron Town, after princess Mononoke

wraith cliff
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great poem artie 🙂 the ending of the second stanza was beautiful

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put me in a blissful state of mind

mental yacht
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Aww thank you so much 💕 means a lot to hear it from you