#too sweet?

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small osprey
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Could it be that I'm too kind?
I revel in making others feel valued and content.
I strive not to let the smallest things bring me down.
I care deeply for those who seem indifferent towards me,
And see the good in others that often goes unnoticed.

I find joy in others' happiness, even when it doesn't concern me.
Some may dislike this, but it's a part of me I can't suppress.
I may mask it, yet the feelings persist.
I find myself apologizing without reason,
And aim to respect others, even when the courtesy isn't reciprocated.

Perhaps you could say I'm too naïve,
Too selfless, or maybe too sweet.
But that's simply who I am.
I'd rather depart this world knowing I helped someone achieve their dream.

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@delicate apex @weak junco @summer siren @primal atlas

delicate apex
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@delicate apex make sure to read this one too

small osprey
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@delicate apex !!!!

delicate apex
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I really like this poem. It's well-written and expresses your feelings in a clear and concise way. I especially like the line "I find joy in others' happiness, even when it doesn't concern me." I can relate to it.
One thing I would suggest is to consider adding more imagery to the poem. This would help to create a more vivid picture in the reader's mind and make the poem more engaging. For example, you could describe the way you feel when you see someone else happy, or the things you do to help others achieve their dreams.
Overall, I think this is a great poem. 9/10

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@small osprey sorry for the delay, i hope it didn't bother you too much

small osprey
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And I’ll put more imagery in my poems

delicate apex
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@small osprey glad to hear that my feedback helped and sorry again, as whenever i found time, i just procrastinated.

small osprey
delicate apex
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Plus any new poem?

small osprey
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And I don’t feel any type of way to write it’s hard for me to write if I’m not feeling a certain way

delicate apex
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How in the world does everyone has someone except me?

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😭😭😭

small osprey
# delicate apex How in the world does everyone has someone except me?

It’s okay not everyone has a significant and that’s okay because it’s always good to focus on yourself and love yourself before loving someone because if you don’t love yourself first the relationship won’t work also it also depends on what you do so what do you do to try to find someone if your looking

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And the right person will come to you

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Buttttt are you looking for someone?

delicate apex
small osprey
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I feel like the past shouldn’t matter it’s how you are now and what you are gonna do to make your life a lot better for you and that person

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There are people that won’t care you just haven’t found the right person

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@delicate apex

delicate apex
small osprey
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How old are you

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?

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Also this world is bigger than it seems there are a lot of people you haven’t found the person so don’t give up and maybe you’ll find them

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@delicate apex

delicate apex
delicate apex
small osprey
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Alr are you looking for people that are younger or older

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Because a lot of people haven’t matured yet

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I feel like there are a lot of 18 year olds on this server

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I thought there would be people that are just in there 20s

delicate apex
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Well, I don't mind age gaps of like a year, but anything older than that is not my type, plus I want someone matured

small osprey
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Im 17

delicate apex
small osprey
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Ig so I’m gonna be 18 in 15 more days

delicate apex
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Oh

small osprey
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Yea

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I don’t wanna age I hate it

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It’s sad

delicate apex
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Btw, what would you suggest so I don't stay a loner this year too?

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Btw arrive in the dm